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torrentoftears [2004-08-10 03:08:47 +0000 UTC]
I really liked it and I have a little constructive critism..you don't even have to listen if you don't want ^^.
"new born, born into" I think that sounds a little but awkward, using the same word twice...
But I love the last stanza...
" Time heals
Artiest with a palate full of ideas
Musician with guitar by his side
Poet with pen in hand and poem in mind"
Great work..!
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dante-17 In reply to torrentoftears [2004-08-18 18:19:16 +0000 UTC]
hey thanks i appreciate the constructive critism, ur right it does sound a little odd.
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NepentheAddict [2004-08-02 10:44:52 +0000 UTC]
I like it. It's very expressive.
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