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Published: 2004-07-25 08:51:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 140; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 18
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A new born, born into violence,hatred, and despair.Small child with a glimmer of hope.
A punk kid with his fists balled full of anger
cock and ready to go at a moments notice
Teenager with curiosity in his heart.
A drunk with bottle in hand broken and lonely
losing the glimmer of hope.
The great escape and hope once more.
The blissful fool who watches happiness past him bye
Again.
Time heals
Artiest with a palate full of ideas
Musician with guitar by his side
Poet with pen in hand and poem in mind
The young man.
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I really liked it and I have a little constructive critism..you don't even have to listen if you don't want ^^.
"new born, born into" I think that sounds a little but awkward, using the same word twice...
But I love the last stanza...
" Time heals
Artiest with a palate full of ideas
Musician with guitar by his side
Poet with pen in hand and poem in mind"
Great work..!
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hey thanks i appreciate the constructive critism, ur right it does sound a little odd.
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Awww that's cute. 
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