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Reminds me of the first one
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Do you natively speak English? Both your grammar and spelling are incorrect, such as your first sentence being a run-on sentence, lack of punctuation, missing letters, and the spelling of "among" and "scythe". I'm not trying to be impolite, simply trying to help you improve upon the English of others. I may also be acting upon OCD.
In regards to the character herself, I think her design is interesting. It's a lot more simplistic than most I've seen, and I think the fact that she is a type of man-made diamond is especially interesting. The only bit of grief I have in regards to her backstory is that you can't really grow anything solid on a gas-based planet, particularly one with winds exceeding 350 mph (approx. 563.27 kilometers per hour). Well, that and the fact that zircon does actually classify as a diamond, though it's less valuable considering it technically isn't a naturally occurring gemstone. However, that's simply nitpicking, and I could go on and on with just about anything when it comes to nitpicking. Now, I find it interesting that you didn't really list any of her powers. I'll let you figure that out on your own though.
Sheesh, maybe I should have made a critique with all this.
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