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DesaraSoleil [2010-04-25 09:56:54 +0000 UTC]
That was beautiful Darkness. I've never been one to enjoy truly lenghty poetry but this was a treat.
The bond between the Oak and the Blade is like that between Master and student, Grandfather and Grandchild, generations that are worlds apart. But wisdom transends through barriers such as this to share knowledge to cause growth. You have that wonderfully expressed here.
Well done and Good Luck in the conetest Darkness.
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DarknessUnknown In reply to DesaraSoleil [2010-04-25 14:35:09 +0000 UTC]
It is actually inspired by the relationship between my little sister and myself.
It's not exactly the same, but it's close; she sees how far I've come, and how much I understand--how much I can talk about with some sort of authority, because I've both read of it and thought hard on the subject, because it's what I do naturally and enjoy. She envies that, and sees the strength, resilience of mind, and ability, as awe-inspiring. She doesn't realize how I had to fight myself, how every moment had to be seen as a war with myself, and all my motives, and how later it became a war with the world, to try and figure things out enough just to live acceptably.
Most people don't understand how to control their mind instead of letting their mind control them. She knows near enough, but she's not as powerfully oriented towards it as myself. Close enough to cause problems with living a normal life, and far enough away to see how much I've achieved, because in my mind I didn't really have a choice, to see it as amazing.
Sometimes I just wish to find someone who truly understands.
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GuardianLord [2010-04-21 06:13:54 +0000 UTC]
this is a really great piece, I love the imagery and the spirit of the whole piece. I don't think the "and they" at the end of the 5th line works. But everything else is really good, and very original.
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JamesTheLionheart [2010-04-20 03:53:05 +0000 UTC]
dude this is truely awesome, if you have any more, could you throw a link my way please?
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