Crystal-Magic13 [2012-03-31 00:04:59 +0000 UTC]
Ideas, Ideas. That's what I'm good at, hmmm.
You never explained how Sherlock became sick,
I would suggest poisening. Mycroft probably
realized this, and had him taken care of.
However, what he was unaware of, was what
was poisening him. It was probably one of
Moriarty's minions, using a difficult to trace
skin contact poison, therefore, Sherlock was
still being poisoned, that would explain why he
got worse after Mycroft left. When John gets to come in
and see him, they should talk about how each of them
felt. And probably how John feels, because
Sherlock's still a mess, and John is quickly
recovering. Try going back and putting
in more sensory details, like what it looked like,
and how the people felt. Use smells, sounds, and
feel, if that helps at all.
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Sherly97 [2012-03-18 22:04:36 +0000 UTC]
:C
Sherlock is dead :CCCC
Its, sad =CCC
Will you wrote a continuation?
I hope you write XD
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