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Hi guys and gals! I've stayed up all night and morning working on this page (10 hours total for colouring the damn thing! @__@ X_X;;...)If possible could you guys let me know your honest feedback on the colouring job? Is the lighting correct? Is the brightness and contrasting balanced? Are the colours equalised and match the mood of the page? Please don't be shy to critique - I need to learn as much as I can to improve and having extra eyes help!
So many questions to ask but nevertheless I would love to hear your thoughts on how the colours worked/not worked on this particular page! Thanks and yay Ashworth says no more to an empty stomach!!
UPDATE - 29/11/2010] Hi again all! Thank you so kindly to each and everyone who had pin-pointed errors in the dialogue and to those who had shared their critique on my colouring work for this particular page! Becaue of it I'm more satisfied with the re-modifications while taking into consideration some of the advice I've been given here by you lot (for instance - the time of day is confusing throughout all panels, Ash worth had too much shading on Panels 01 + 02, Ruby lacked depth on Panel 02, etc...)
So thank you once again for sharing your feedback! Maybe it's actually a good idea to submit my pages here so that more people can share in their views on what can be fixed - and also help spell check/grammar check for me so that I can make the changes right away! What do you think?
The new and improved colours can be viewed on my official website: [link]
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With regards to the lighting on the backgrounds - what colours would you suggest for a bright mid-day?
So far my timeline for the day with Chapter 09 goes like this: Pages 01-03 - Early morning (sun is just about to rise), Pages 05-06 - Mid-day (when the sun is fully up) with blue skies, cloudless).
Page 06 is all the way mid-day. I changed the colours in the middle and bottom panels because I felt lighting would be different if you're in town - light bounces off from objects such as buildings, trees and people hence giving off a different colour right?
Any help on this would be much appreciated buddy!
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Heya Syaming-li! I didn't expect a critique from you and boy am I very pleased. 
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There's some really nice color going on here, especially in the third and fourth panels. But the first two panels are not very pleasing to the eye-- too many bright primaries, like the lime green grass and Ruby's feather... hair... whatever go against my taste in color (please note that my monitor is calibrated a little strangely-- it makes reds brighter). Also, that green tint in Ashworth's hair seems out of place in the bright afternoon or evening lighting. Perhaps if they were in a forest it would work, but not on the beach. Speaking of the ocean, the contrast in detail between the first panels' backgrounds and the rest of the comic is a bit jarring. The last thing I'm having trouble placing is the exact time of day you're going for. I'm guessing there's a time jump from afternoon to early evening in the third panel, but in the fifth and sixth panels seems to switch back to afternoon, due to the flatness of the sky, and the loss of that evening glow in panels three and four (which is excellent).
I know this looks like a lot of criticism, but really all these problems could be fixed with some quick tweaking.
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Another thing I will add - it's such a bloomin' challenge to get the colours right when your characters are in a primary colour itself! XXD Humans don't have bright and vibrant colours in their skin (unless their costumes have colours to that effect)!
It seems that I've taken a tougher road in my journey to improve on my colouring! X_X; Thanks again for your opinion on the page.
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Thanks Evan for your feedback and insight to the shading and colour elements of the page! I totally agree about the mood setting/time of day colours being all muddled up and confusing. I'll see what I can do to fix that up.
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The colors and shading look great, I love the scenery. Beautifully done.
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The scenery is magnificent. 
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Well, y'know what they say. The way to a man's heart is his stomach!
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wasn't Ruby's hair a bit darker? She looks like a citrus we call Narenge! and Ashworth's fang looks a bit ... I don't know how to say... but graet one after all! I really like the way you draw it. but it's totally insane to spent 10 hours in front of tv drawing comic! you might hve to wear glasses like me -__-;;
Ashworths sick expression are so cool! but that girl/guy runing doesn't have a very clear face. and how you draw the city is magneficent! how do you draw it so good? would you give me some advice?
good luck and I miss the Pack man hat's comic... continue it please
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wasn't Ruby's hair a bit darker? She looks like a citrus we call Narenge! and Ashworth's fang looks a bit ... I don't know how to say... but graet one after all! I really like the way you draw it. but it's totally insane to spent 10 hours in front of tv drawing comic! you might hve to wear glasses like me -__-;;
Ashworths sick expression are so cool! but that girl/guy runing doesn't have a very clear face. and how you draw the city is magneficent! how do you draw it so good? would you give me some advice?
good luck and I miss the Pack man hat's comic... continue it please
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I really like the way the new page here looks. The colours look really good, and your comic style has improved a lot. Of course, there are always things to learn too, and I guess the critiques you got are actually pretty helpful in that.
I like the panel with the town especially, it is still hard for me to include real backgrounds to my comics. I still have to learn alot in that direction.
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I like what you've done with the distance speech bubbles; implanting the character's face into each one. Nice touch! And the colouring of that far shot, the roof tiles and everything, very purdiful. You've captured an early morning/late afternoon sunshine quite well.
There's something about the lineart and the lighting job that I can't quite put my finger on, though. Might be the tiny gradient of fade between shades? That combined with the fact that the lineart is pronounced on the characters and nonexistent on the backgrounds. It might be just me but I feel like a clear difference in style between character/foreground and background might as well go all the way, y'know? 
It works well where the lines are a little thinner/blended in a little like in the wide-shot and the panel under it.
Keep up the good work, dude.
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Oh wow. You've gotten really good. Or is it because i haven't seen your art in awhile. Ah either way this page is amazing and the coloring looks pretty professional.
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I read the awesomeness that is between every page of your comic.
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OMG!!!!!!!!
This looks so cool!!!! XD
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This is a lovely page of work that certainly shows a significant amount of improvement in the working of page layout, character design and most of all colouring. What you've done overall is good and a serious step up from the days of old, to see your pages enriched with colour and to also see how you've progressed with the facial expressions of those you draw and how fluent and animated they become. While over the top, they certainly work well with your style and really bring a great deal of the humour and enjoyment of your work.
What is really interesting to see here though in terms of colour is the exploration and play around with shading you've made with the hues. The shading is much slicker and tightened here and connected to what you are wanted to show and your ways of drawing. The soft edging and warm tint of the colours selected really have a better impact than being hard edged than in previous pages, allowing the design of the character and their characterstics to have more on an impact and appeal.
Overall this is nice and really shows a tremendous level of progression with both your story and workings of digitally colouring/drawing.
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Thanks Sam. = ) I'm always doing my best to progress with the comic and especially when it comes to the 'colouring' of the comic.
I've got much, much more to do - always falling behind after finishing the latest page. X_X; XD I'll probably have to do a backlog of pages so that I can keep up with the pace.
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Your welcome mate, please keep it up. I'm sure in time you'll be the next Stan Lee of the sonic world.
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Ha ha! Probably take a million years before I get to his level. 
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Your very welcome and please keep it up.
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Man, excellent job in this page!! The colouring on Characters is very good, but the coloouring of backgrounds is EXCELLENT!! Specially on 3rd panel, the composition is beautiful!!Keep up the great work n Grand Hunter! <3
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Thanks Felipe! I very much appreciate your compliments on my comic so far.
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AWESOME!
by the looks of it, your coloring style improved by like 100% or something,... I dunno really. I'm bad with giving points and all. XP;
But there's something that caught my eye. Did you notice that on last panel, Corny doesn't have any fingers on his front paws?
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You're looking at the bottom part of his hands (i.e. the palm). You won't seen his paws and such! XD You can see the paw lines on his feet though because it is naturally turned upside-down when you're in a flying position. = )
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yes, but if you look at cat's paw from the bottom, you should still see at least a lil bit of fingers on it
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He's got cursed paws (without the fingers!)!! O.O XXXXXXD
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Lol, okay now you're just being silly! XD
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I've been fucking LOOKING for this shit forEVER.
Saw it a long time ago and was dumb enough not to add you to my watchlist.
Well, here you go, and, fave.
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Thanks dude for the watch! There's more GH comics to come in the future. *thumbs up*
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No sweat, bro. Glad I finally found your damn page.
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EspaΓ±ol
Genial, buen trabajo. apenas estoy leyendo tu comic y me parece fantastico.
Disculpa, pero debo poner mis comentarios en mi idioma nativo. Muchos habla hispanos olvidamos nuestra lengua nativa. Espero no te moleste.
English
Great, good job. I'm just reading your comic and I feel fantastic.
Sorry, but I put my comments in my native language. Many Hispanics speak forget our native language. I hope you do not mind.
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Oh wow! Thank you so kindly for your comments Rav-M! Muchos gracias I'd say!
You don't need to be sorry, I just hope I can get more feedback from you in future.
If you liked my comic you can actually own a copy of the first book right here! [link] Every bit of support helps.
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really cool ^^ ... some Slayers 's on the air
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Coloring is a little off in the first panel, but aside from that, it's perfect!
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the art on the third panel is just so nice to look at.
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Thanks dude and btw you rock for having Rob O' Hedge in as your avatar!!
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The coloring is spectacular. Especially the town scene. I think this was worth every hour you didnt get sleep bro. Its a remarkable piece. :3
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haha its look pretty good buddy ^^ (the worst person you can ever ask to critique?)
Im just crazy about the BG *3* haha very lovely job mi amigo ~
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Thanks Evy.
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aww awesome :3 sorry I'm really not much help HAHAHA!
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I like this coloring a lot compared to the older coloring. And I really have to give you credit for your writing, especially the humor. Good Job
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Wow I got complimented on the dialogue/writing! That is one of my weakest elements to be honest so it's nice to hear how I'm doing in that area.
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Thanks man, haven't seen you in a while!
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busy.... reeeely busy
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You did a fantastic job on this. I don't know if anyone else has said this yet but Isn't it supposed to say in the third panel: "The inn I stayed in is just up ahead",?
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