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tfpal [2021-05-11 13:34:50 +0000 UTC]
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Chugdee [2015-11-14 07:03:47 +0000 UTC]
JJ
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coolcat616 [2015-09-02 22:32:42 +0000 UTC]
Finish it plz
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Dunne [2012-05-08 03:27:31 +0000 UTC]
This is rather impressive. You've managed to make a story in the realm of the fetish and not fill it or fall in to the cliches that often riddle such literature on the subject such as this one. The detail is present throughout, and I appreciate the more piece by piece transformation from eating pizza to how each article of clothing comes off.
You've certainly avoided the cliches, and that I would like to compliment you for. Too often I've seen others fall in to the pitfalls and frankly their writing goes nothing beyond that.
Kudos.
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DeathBAT411 In reply to Dunne [2012-05-08 04:14:50 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! I didn't really expect this story to go over well to tell the truth but I appreciate the positive feedback I have got from it.
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Openminded20 [2012-04-23 02:28:25 +0000 UTC]
I really liked this, you did a great job ^_^
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the-random-lord [2012-02-26 21:49:06 +0000 UTC]
i love all your stories
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the-random-lord In reply to DeathBAT411 [2012-05-04 19:20:06 +0000 UTC]
yeah i know i sometimes say things twice but your stuff is the best
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Cutter2506 [2011-12-01 23:33:32 +0000 UTC]
Looking forward to part 2
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DeathBAT411 In reply to Cutter2506 [2011-12-02 02:45:54 +0000 UTC]
I'll let people know cause I may not make a new story entirely but maybe just add onto this one. Shouldn't be too long cause I think I liked how this story turned out.
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