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DeathOfTheChosen — Illness
Published: 2007-05-18 16:18:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 578; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 7
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Description Who are you?
Your eyes glowing red
What are you doing inside my head?
What is it you’re saying?
Whispering to me
What is it you’re doing?
What do you want of me?

“Kill your friends!” The little voice said
“Take a knife and chop of their heads
Make them squeal
Make them run
Take out their hearts
With the aid of a gun.”

“Find those hiding in your walls
Kill all those who haunt your halls
You have no one
Only me
Everyone else is your enemy.”

Said the little voice inside my head
As I killed my friends
And chopped off their heads
Made them squeal
Made them run
And blew them to bits with the aid of a gun

This padded room serves as my cell
I sit in here and rot in hell
And that voice comes back
That little one
“Now you see
That was fun.”
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Comments: 26

ForeverWalking [2008-03-24 17:01:42 +0000 UTC]

Very well written! I like it a lot. Very emotional and you captured the mood perfectly. It's hard to get into someone elses character, something I cannot do but you did well writing this.

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to ForeverWalking [2008-03-25 20:46:37 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! This is the most Fun I've ever had writing so I'm very glad other people enjoy it.

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BreathlessWind [2008-03-20 02:04:39 +0000 UTC]

Bravo! that's deffinately my second favourite poem! the first one is "Never More" or "Raven" by Edgar Allen Poe. is it supposed to be relating to D.N. (deathnote)? if it isn't it's still a very well construscted poem i've actually gotten into the spirit of writing a little bit of poetry myself, but none of them are as good as this, or Edgar Allen Poe, have you ever heard of David Buchard? i've met him a couple times, and he's an awesome poet as well, you should read some of his work

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to BreathlessWind [2008-03-21 00:39:50 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou very much! No its not about Death Note, it was for my friend's story she is in the process of writing. I do like Edgar Allen Poe, he is truly ingenious, however, I have never heard of David Buchard.

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BreathlessWind In reply to DeathOfTheChosen [2008-03-21 04:26:48 +0000 UTC]

he wrote a poetry book called (i think it's called) "If you have never been to the prairies" or something like that, it's pretty good, one of the times i saw him i was in a bit up a writers slump and i asked him for advice n' stuff. so i guess it'd be worth giving a look. EDGAR ALLEN POE IS PRO! haahaa, just kiding.

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to BreathlessWind [2008-03-21 18:57:32 +0000 UTC]

Oh ok, I'll be sure to check it out.

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BreathlessWind In reply to DeathOfTheChosen [2008-03-24 01:02:13 +0000 UTC]

cool, tell me what you think about it afterwords

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ku-leo-lev [2007-06-01 11:23:17 +0000 UTC]

wow thats so moving...and emotional..
i love it : )

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to ku-leo-lev [2007-06-02 00:09:14 +0000 UTC]

lol, well...It was based off my friend's story so, thats basically the mood I ended up with It was very fun to write though, I enjoyed it *evil snicker*

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Saria-Sama [2007-05-20 15:26:27 +0000 UTC]

Omg! I loves you! My poem for Kain is amazing! You should write me more poems more!!!! J/k

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to Saria-Sama [2007-05-20 19:18:19 +0000 UTC]

heh, how long do you think that would take lol

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Saria-Sama In reply to DeathOfTheChosen [2007-05-21 20:23:02 +0000 UTC]

A couple more years. -_-

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to Saria-Sama [2007-05-21 21:48:01 +0000 UTC]

probably...

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Sahara-chan [2007-05-20 00:17:34 +0000 UTC]

That is my all time favourite poem too! <3
*loves*

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to Sahara-chan [2007-05-20 19:19:27 +0000 UTC]

heheheh, I had fun.

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Sahara-chan In reply to DeathOfTheChosen [2007-05-23 02:45:25 +0000 UTC]

Like Deathnotegasm?

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to Sahara-chan [2007-05-23 11:13:32 +0000 UTC]

O.o weh?

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Sahara-chan In reply to DeathOfTheChosen [2007-05-24 02:52:33 +0000 UTC]

...You've seen deathnotegasm.

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to Sahara-chan [2007-05-24 21:27:44 +0000 UTC]

Oooh yeahhhhh. Mmmm, that was a damn hot death *evil grin*

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Sahara-chan In reply to DeathOfTheChosen [2007-05-28 19:23:51 +0000 UTC]

xD;;;

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sess-chan [2007-05-19 03:07:19 +0000 UTC]

Oh my God. I do believe that was the best poem I've ever read. *faves*

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to sess-chan [2007-05-19 20:34:15 +0000 UTC]

lol, thanks so much it is my favourite out of all the things I've written. I had so much fun writing it too heh heh

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sess-chan In reply to DeathOfTheChosen [2007-05-19 22:01:27 +0000 UTC]

It looked very fun to write That would be the kind of things I write about if I had the talent.

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to sess-chan [2007-05-19 22:38:27 +0000 UTC]

lol, I'd love to read them if you did write them!

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sess-chan In reply to DeathOfTheChosen [2007-05-20 03:57:38 +0000 UTC]

Oh no. I can't write for shit.

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DeathOfTheChosen In reply to sess-chan [2007-05-20 12:33:34 +0000 UTC]

Ahh, I'm sure you're just being over critical. Thats what I thought about my writing as well.

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