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Good-Pazuzu [2011-03-21 23:32:48 +0000 UTC]
((Oh my god.....I think it has actually been years since I cried at a story....
And honestly,I have to say I hate my imagination,cause as I was reading it,I was picturing every single scene as though watching a show...I have always done that...but never actually cried from it.
And you are really an awesome writer,and I wish I could write this well...(I have yet to write a script for my anime,or title music and ending music for that matter)
But all that aside,you really know how to paint a story with words...))
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deckhandnagogo In reply to Good-Pazuzu [2011-03-22 16:01:43 +0000 UTC]
((Ahh, thank you. : D I try and write scenes as they appear with as much detail as possible to make people see things as clearly as I can. I know I can never conjure up exactly the same images, but getting as close as I can to the actual thing is what matters to me. Hell, even being able to evoke imagery at all!
...I'll say the hardest part with writing is definitely choosing the words, because I have this scene in mind down to the "t" but I need some way to describe it in that detail. Synonyms come in handy because repeating the same words over and over throughout a story can be very bothersome. But sometimes synonyms are not so easy to find, sometimes words are exchanged for better ones or taken out altogether, and sometimes you just can't find the right ones to say.))
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Good-Pazuzu In reply to deckhandnagogo [2011-03-22 19:22:42 +0000 UTC]
((Your welcome,and I completely agree with you,you can never find the right words,sometimes you even struggle to find the right words when talking with a friend,it's kinda irritating I find))
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worstmate-hikiki [2011-02-21 06:59:26 +0000 UTC]
((ok so I wanted to read this one more time to refresh myself before commenting and STILL SAD AS EVER. Even already knowing what happens...But you know. It's one of those kinds of poignant sadnesses that you feel right here in your heart hnngh. There is this kind of brief passing sadness, like when you watch a movie that makes you cry, and maybe you think about it the rest of the night but the next day you don't really dwell on it much. BUT then there is this, and of course the fact that many of us have been interacting with Nagogo for so long makes what takes place here all the more affecting... Oh hell I can't put it into words very well, but then I think that is a fantastic thing to be able to cause in people! Let's just go with this: I was truly moved. About a football field's length (Titanic, maybe that of a bowling alley lane). THE KLEENEX SHOULD SPEAK FOR THEMSELVES.
I seriously applaud you for tackling a subject like this. Even despite the natural element of unpleasantness in reading about death, specifically that of a character as beloved as Nagogo, this was far from a grim piece, really the opposite in fact...which is a major relief to a lot of us, I think. Not that I mean to overshadow the suffering crew members like Pirarah and Kanini end up going through...Those bits themselves were painful to read. But the hope contained in that one little feather...!
Which kind of reminds me, the mental image evoked when Nagogo enters the male sleeping quarters to find Pirarah staring straight at him, red eyes glowing in the dark but supposedly not seeing him. Every time I read that it gives me chills. It is hard to describe, but I really like that part.
AND ALSO Shi...it's easy to dislike him for being TOTALLY EVIL FROM OUR STANDPOINT but honestly this kind of paints him in a new light. Which is nice...we don't hear from him too much (probably for the better!) and when we do it's hardly anything good, so this view of him is refreshing, not to mention surprising. And his logic, well...it's hard to argue with. Neither option is a particularly pleasant way to die, but man, just wasting away ailing in bed for who knows how long would be...yeah....
Additionally, the original picture is absolutely gorgeous, and I get what you mean when you say that the black background detracts from the feeling you're going for (and of course the glowing wouldn't show up as well on white! Darn it colors). So not to knock that image - I just also agree that using Pirarah's card for the title image gives the entire thing a slightly more powerful effect. His relationship with Pirarah does, after all, seem to be one of the most important things in Nagogo's life. Arggh my heartstrings...
So pretty much a 1000000% congrats on what you've accomplished here, Swizz. Your writing seriously does blow me away. I mean it. -serious face- Here's to whatever Next Big Thing the future brings us!))
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deckhandnagogo In reply to worstmate-hikiki [2011-02-26 16:46:09 +0000 UTC]
((Aaaaa what a lovely wall of text ;; -smashed under the compliment-
You know, people ask me all the time: Why did you do it? Why did you kill off your favorite character?
The answer(s) is not really an easy one to get at. One of the reasons is that it brings a whole new sense of reality into a world that otherwise has very little. All of the fantastic characters I have ever read about or watched on television have this sense of “realism” to them; if their traits are developed to the point where you can clearly picture them walking down the street, determine how they will react in certain situations, even consider them someone you know to the extent of a friend…this is the type of character I wish to create and I think Nagogo is clearly the most defined out of any of mine. And, as much as his accent is a pain in the ass to write sometimes [and sometimes I forget], it just gives that much more of a boost to his personability. Defining relationships among other characters also helps a character form and bring a story to life…this is probably why the DFT is so successful. The “nakama” vibes among the members of the tribe just brings this entirely new dimension of feeling to the story. While they may be a bit of a dysfunctional family, the fact that they generally live in peace in one big group united in a common goal just…it’s something that I cannot easily explain. But it’s there, this intangible wave of emotions.
This is also the reason I do not have 438543897 orikero…because it takes a painstaking amount of time to craft a character out in full. I’ve not even begun to touch on all the aspects of, say, Kanini, and Kumomo [who has been on the backburner for nearly two years].
In the real world, people die and it brings together everyone who has ever known the deceased. When Nagogo dies, all the tribe members toss aside their differences and truly bond together as a family for that one period of time during the funeral. In many stories or cartoons, characters may live on forever...which is not so realistic. A typical “Disney” type character gets the stereotypical “happy ending” and we assume they live their life in prestige the rest of the time. Nobody ever considers the ticking of the clock that dominates so much of our lives and the ultimate deadline that is to come from it.
Another reason, but significantly less of an influence in my decision, is that it breaks the norm and it’s unexpected (at least the first time anything was published!). Throwing the audience for a loop is something that I, as an amateur author, enjoy doing. Evoking such powerful emotions, even though I APOLOGIZE for completely annihilating a tissue box, is what I seek to do, what many authors seek to do. To get such an overwhelming response from words on a page or text on a screen from multiple people shows to me that I have succeeded in creating the type of character I have wished to create…because that response only happens when you develop that personal bond toward a character.
But the reason I wrote this, aside from trying to release my pent up feelings about my friend’s death, is to say that Nagogo’s inevitable end does not have to be the end. Leaving it off on such a note promotes a world of possibility in the remaining years of the tribe and the amazingly powerful bond between Nagogo and “litl lad” lives on, even long after Nagogo has left the world of the living. Everyone knows that, eventually, Pirarah will join him and they can spend eternity together in rest.
Now, is this situation realistic…? I will make myself look like a hypocrite for a moment here and say “not really” unless the members of the audience are religious and believe in such a thing. But I will go against my word and say that this ending doesn’t have to be. Not all elements of a story should be realistic…because we read stories, we watch movies, as an escape from this reality.
To end on such a hopeful word of what the future can bring and the endless situations that arise from it…))
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PlantKeronianHanana [2011-02-09 13:02:01 +0000 UTC]
((That part where Nagogo found that paper in his coffin...the one that said big brother...that's so sad!!! *Cries* And I liked the part where he told Pirarah he'd watch over him was a great ending!))
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