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deToledo — Part I
Published: 2007-03-18 04:58:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 97; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Description I approached to it

I opened the door

Right infront of my eyes

The consummation of love
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deToledo - A ti
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naduggn [2007-03-21 07:58:49 +0000 UTC]

i love it. theres no telling in my mind whether it neccessarilly means a solid, seen door or if it is an emotional hurdle that people overcome, if that makes sense?

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deToledo In reply to naduggn [2007-03-23 22:18:40 +0000 UTC]

yess.. just like that.. not necessary a door.. I meant like this mental barrier

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naduggn In reply to deToledo [2007-03-24 10:44:01 +0000 UTC]

i thought you did to be honest. but you never know. the best thing about poetry is that when its left open to be interperated most people wont see the same thing

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swimstarguy [2007-03-21 03:37:27 +0000 UTC]

I got the image of me opening the door when my girlfriend has just gotten here and she's outside. ^__^


~Zar4

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deToledo In reply to swimstarguy [2007-03-23 22:14:46 +0000 UTC]

awnnnn really??? awesomeeee!!

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enslavedsphinx [2007-03-18 11:31:31 +0000 UTC]

Sex?
I always like 4-liner.
Nice..
Hey I got some short poem too.
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deToledo In reply to enslavedsphinx [2007-03-18 16:44:03 +0000 UTC]

haha yeap..
I was actually thinking about continue the story..
I'm not sure, maybe I'll keep it that simple

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enslavedsphinx In reply to deToledo [2007-03-19 03:17:57 +0000 UTC]

You can continue it (the thought), but I think in another poem.

That is so cool to me that it is already great in its form as it is now.

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