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devilskitten — Pool of Blood
Published: 2004-02-14 04:14:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 251; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 85
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Swimming in a poolA pool of your blood.
Blood that I stripped from your body.
Sucked from your veins.
I once held you close
But you tore up my heart.
So I tore up your body.
Stole your heart
And now swim in your blood.
Everyday it kills me
Digs into me like thorns.
I killed you.
I live in your blood
Yet would not live without it.
Its my pool,
My home,
My life.
Its you
Completely you
But not your body
But I have your blood
Sucked through your veins
Now made to my home.
And everyday I regret it.
But everyday I love it.
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Comments: 27
It popped up when I was done writing the last journal entry and oh how fitting. It's even more beautiful than before.
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Wonderful. It is.
~Ciao
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Do you do the artwork that goes along with your poems?
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No not any of the ones I have right now. I do have art work that goes to some of my poems, but its not on here. So ya. But these are not my pictures. I get them off the net.
~Ciao
~Kat
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Again, very nice. Kinda morbid, but I'm all for that. Great Job!
~Bird
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Hey thanks. And ya its a little morbid but what can you do. LoL. Well byes.
~Ciao
~Kat
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Again, very nice. Kinda morbid, but I'm all for that.
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Hey hun, thanks. I was having one of those days were I guess I just wrote like that. A lot of my poems now have been kinda like this one. I wrote one but didnt put it on cause I cant name it..its kinda morbid. Haha. Oh well.
~Ciao
~Kat
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This is an emotional piece. You did an awesome job of taking your deep, complex feelings and transfering them to paper. I think many people feel the same as you, but i doubt most can capture it as you did.
Your diction was good, it was a bit dark, which helped the mood of the poem. I liked your flow, it was very easy to read. In the first stanza, you used the word "blood" a lot. I know you were writing about that, but the repitition was kind of "sticky".
Keep up the great work!
greg!
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Hey thanks a lot. Im glad that you liked my poem. I seem to write a lot about my feeling and everything. LoL. I just do. But ya. Ya I noticed I used the word blood a lot. And I probably should have changed that, but I decided not to. Too lazy. Haha. Im really glad that you like this poem, and thank you very much for the great compliment, and the insight on what I can do to improve my poems.
~Ciao
~Kat
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Not a problem, it was a joy to read it, and have someone appricheate my insight.
Hope you can check out my poems too!
Greg!
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Hey well Im glad that you liked it, and i take in what people have to say about my work. Then I can improve on it as well. And Ill be checking out your poems.
~Ciao
~Kat
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nice I like things that can have 2 different meanings, to me it could be about drug addiction or fatal attraction and a broken heart, nice piece
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Hey thanks a lot. I never realised that it could have 2 different meanings. But now that you mention it, it does make sense. Well thanks for the comment.
~Ciao
~Kat
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beutiful . . . must say, as a lover of the strange, and dark . . . absolutely beutiful
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Hey thank you. Im glad that you like it so much. I really like it too. Thanks so much for the compliment.
~Ciao
~Kat
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welcome, from author to author . . . you got talent!
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Hey thanks. The means a lot. Thanks.
~Ciao
~Kat
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it should, its very good work
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Hey thanks. Im glad you like it as well. Thanks a lot.
~Ciao
~Kat
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