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Published: 2012-04-03 01:21:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 1061; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 20
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Description Gonna write a story about him later. In chapter format. Would you read?
(( I forgot his saber fangs ;A; ))

Name: Xavier D. Scourge ((Real last name unknown))
Nicknames: Danger ((a joke because his middle name starts with a D)), Saber, and Rally
Code Names: X, Leodon, and Smite
Species: Smilodon/Leopard shark hybrid
Age: 28 ((?))
Inherited Abilities 1: Like his Smilodon parent, Xavier has the head, arms, torso, and legs of a the large prehistoric cat, also gaining its cropped mane and large canines. His hands are more like a Smilodon's, with large claws and a human/paw-like form. He is also skilled on land and can attain short bursts of speed. Like the Smilodon, he has a set of lungs.
Inherited Abilities 2: Like his Leopard Shark parent, Xavier has two rows of jagged and crooked teeth, along with a rather flat, white tongue. He has obtained the fins and tail of this parent as well, with its distinctive markings. His feet are webbed and a mix of fins and claws. Xavier is also a very good swimmer, and has a set of gills.
Abilities From Both: Xavier can survive both above and below water for long periods of time (months).
Personality: Xavier is extremely cautious of other people, and has a very negative outlook. He retains a mental distance from others at all times, but cares deeply for others. He's often found either roaming abandoned cities looking for survivors, or helping someone to the closest friendly shelter. Xavier takes it as a personal failure if someone dies in his care.
Bio: Xavier was born into a post-apocalyptic world. His parents were conducting an experiment more than anything: to see if they could create the ultimate survivor. However, before Xavier had a chance to be called a success or failure, his parents (and small group) were killed, and he was taken away. He was to small to remember this.
By the time the hybrid was a teenager, he wanted to escape from his abusive captors. He managed to do so by escaping through a narrow, underwater cavern after outrunning a couple land animals. After escaping (at roughly 15?), Xavier began to fend for himself, avoiding others at all costs.
By adulthood, Xavier was able to comprehend his abilities and use them to his advantage. He could get food from deep under water, or high up on land. Though he found himself with an undying need to help others.
Xavier later joined a cult who sacrificed others to please their 'God,' in the hopes that the world would return to its former glory... /To be continued?/

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EVERYTHING (c) *DevilsWatchOverUs /ME!
/Though I must thank ~wolfdogwolf for the species idea. ;A; and they have permission to use the cult story on Furcadia with credit/
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Comments: 21

LuffytheKumquat [2012-04-05 01:47:04 +0000 UTC]

Yeah! leopard shark-wolf dude!!

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to LuffytheKumquat [2012-04-05 01:50:05 +0000 UTC]

Smilodon is a prehistoric cat, also known as the 'saber-tooth cat.' But close enough.

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LuffytheKumquat In reply to DevilsWatchOverUs [2012-04-05 21:38:30 +0000 UTC]

WHATEVER!

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to LuffytheKumquat [2012-04-05 21:57:04 +0000 UTC]

c:

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raveyote-joe [2012-04-03 23:10:55 +0000 UTC]

I congratulate you sir... this is the most epic hybrid I have seen so far.

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to raveyote-joe [2012-04-03 23:13:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! <3 But the idea for the hybrid was ~wolfdogwolf 's! I just designed it.

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raveyote-joe In reply to DevilsWatchOverUs [2012-04-04 00:04:28 +0000 UTC]

Still a cool redesign.

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to raveyote-joe [2012-04-04 00:05:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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raveyote-joe In reply to DevilsWatchOverUs [2012-04-04 00:43:45 +0000 UTC]

your welcome.

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GreenShadowFigure [2012-04-03 19:36:30 +0000 UTC]

I love it, he looks amazing! But I do have one suggestion. His tail is covering up his butt. Usually tails are located just above the butt, like the tail bone or something (I don't no were all the bones in a human body are located ). But other than that its an amazing design and I under stand his tail is big and its hard to design pants for it if the tail is higher. Jus' a suggestion is all. Hope it helps some!

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to GreenShadowFigure [2012-04-03 22:34:33 +0000 UTC]

I've never done a tail like that before. ;u; Believe me, how I wanted it to look and how it came out are two different things entirely. XDD

Thanks!

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GreenShadowFigure In reply to DevilsWatchOverUs [2012-04-04 19:48:16 +0000 UTC]

I know what you mean, and your welcome!

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niffykid [2012-04-03 08:47:25 +0000 UTC]

wait what!!! you did that....did you get a new program or something...

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to niffykid [2012-04-03 22:23:43 +0000 UTC]

No, I have Paint Tool Sai, and I've had that for a while. XD

I've used it to make stuff I think is better than this too. ;u; XD

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niffykid In reply to DevilsWatchOverUs [2012-04-04 09:43:29 +0000 UTC]

o,o

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Chimaerok [2012-04-03 05:08:22 +0000 UTC]

Doing my normal evade-the-critique-box thing. |D

First, the design itself is pretty awesome. I like the idea of combining a smilodon with a leopard shark, and the colours go together really well. There are a few things I'd personally change about the design, but I'm assuming you're looking more for critiques on anatomy, so if you want a design crit, you can ask me later. : D It's very very nice overall, though.

The first thing I noticed is that his back is lacking that line where his spine would be. It also makes his back fin look a little awkward, like it isn't attached right. With him being a hybrid though, I'm not sure if this was intentional or not.
His left arm also looks much too short. The average person's arm goes to about mid-thigh when their body is straightened out, and that arm looks like it would only go just past his leg/hip joint. The fingers on the hand of this arm also look a little short, and unless he has his hand positioned very oddly, they'd wrap around his arm a bit more.
The other arm is fine as far as length goes, but compared to the rest of his body, it looks a little thin. I would personally even this out by either making his body slimmer or his arm more muscular.

His collar looks a little too loose, and looks like it was made from some kind of fabric. His pants looks strange too, and the hole for his tail looks very awkward. Though speaking as someone with a fursona with a similarly thick tail, I can understand it's hard to accomodate pants in a way that makes sense. D:
If you don't do this already, I'd suggest sketching out the basic body shape lightly and draw the clothing on afterwards. This will make it look much more natural, and you have a better chance to experiment with how gravity and wind and such would affect the clothes.

The only other thing I can really think of to point out is that his face shape looks more like a wolf than a smilodon. But other than that, you've done a great job. 8D Overall awesome character design, the pose fits the background very well and gives a little look into what his personality may be before reading the description.

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to Chimaerok [2012-04-03 22:31:44 +0000 UTC]

Ffff. One of these days. XDD

As far as the species idea goes, go tell :devwolfdongwolf: how awesome the idea is. x3

Considering the amount of fur a Smilodon /might/ have, I figured the fur would hide the initial line- I tried to make the fin make up for that, with little success. xD
If you notice, the hand of his left arm is resting just past his mid-thigh. And the fingers are meant to be hidden entirely. And I suck with muscles. I'm learning though. XD

Yes and yes, but I'm very bad with leather affects, though I hope you can see I attempted it. XD I've never done pants at that angle, let alone a hole for such a tail, so that was kind of a shot in the dark for me. Pants are evil. ;u;
I do sketch, but find the angle I have to draw at hard. I don't have a desk at my computer, so I have to have my tablet on a plastic board-like thing and my elbow is normally not able to go back to far, because it cannot phase though my throne-like computer chair. XDD!

I tried for something thicker than a wolf muzzle, however, I suck at broad muzzles. Perhaps it's because I prefer longer, thicker ones. XD And thank you very much for the critique!

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Chimaerok In reply to DevilsWatchOverUs [2012-04-04 00:58:12 +0000 UTC]

Whoops, I am a total retard. xD; Reverse all my uses of "left" and "right". I wrote this crit at 1:30 AM, sorry.

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to Chimaerok [2012-04-04 01:07:08 +0000 UTC]

It's totally okay dude <3 XDDD

The arm is meant to appear bent, if you notice, fingers are on his other arm... but they're meant to be mostly hidden, as if his arm is not there for a strict reason, or just being moved away. ^^

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Chimaerok In reply to DevilsWatchOverUs [2012-04-04 03:15:41 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, that's what I'm saying. xD The bent arm that he's resting on his other arm, it looks too short, based on where his elbow is.

I probably worded the crit terribly, sorry. xD; I need to remember to wait until the morning before doing them.

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DevilsWatchOverUs In reply to Chimaerok [2012-04-04 18:43:38 +0000 UTC]

I see what you mean now. xD

It's fine. I appreciate the time you took to do it anyways XDD!

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