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HeartTheGlaceon [2012-07-05 00:44:49 +0000 UTC]
I started crying around the end...
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SunnyUra [2012-02-05 14:31:01 +0000 UTC]
That. Was. AMAZING!!!!!!!! You have basically just summed up Wheatley 100% perfectly and in such a beautiful way!! Wow....
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CrazyGoomba [2011-11-12 18:55:03 +0000 UTC]
GLaDOS:....Why am i doing this??
Activating Core retrieval beam.
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LittleBasementKitten [2011-11-01 21:45:05 +0000 UTC]
I'm no critic, but I know what I hate. And...I don't hate this.
THIS IS SO CAKING AWESOME I'M NOT EVEN EXAGGERATING WITH CAPS-LOCK!! *insta'fav*
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Neko-setsuka [2011-09-11 06:55:35 +0000 UTC]
This made me cry. ; A ; And omg you did an amazing job analyzing the information you got from portal!
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Tearahk [2011-09-11 05:33:38 +0000 UTC]
this was, just... wow! It was the best read Iv had in a good long time. You were so good at capturing his thoughts, his way of thinking that I actually thought it was made by Wheatley himself.
Its always so great and refreshing to see things from a perspective other than that of the main character, and to go in depth with a character like Wheatley is just amazing. You get a chance to look at things trough their eyes and understand their side of the story and you were so good at bringing that out. Thanks for putting this up, it was a pleasure reading it. ^_^
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KatzenIsSassy [2011-08-18 03:33:41 +0000 UTC]
.......Whoa, I'm glad I read this, it's so amazing. Your a good writer! WIN FOR YOU!
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JOCKPRIEST [2011-07-01 01:51:00 +0000 UTC]
This is scary.
This is funny.
This is adorable.
This is beautiful.
This is clever.
This is Wheatley.
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SnuggieFullOfEvil [2011-05-28 17:28:34 +0000 UTC]
I cried. I love this. I love you. You are the most amazing person in the entire world. Go write a novel or write a videogame or something. I love you. Go take over the world, you deserve it.
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TheCorty [2011-05-17 17:06:59 +0000 UTC]
โฅ! I LOVE this
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Moonlightglitter [2011-05-15 06:57:53 +0000 UTC]
This is very very amazing. I actually cried, especially at the end. They should have Portal 3, and in that you have to save Wheatley. Or something.. D:
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Mejin [2011-05-12 23:21:17 +0000 UTC]
(Nam)
...I...wow, I think you might have just made me cry.
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Digi-Writes-Fanfics In reply to Mejin [2011-05-13 00:09:31 +0000 UTC]
Dang. Well, I'm glad my writing had such an effect, thank you. :3
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Gummie-Alien [2011-05-12 06:27:08 +0000 UTC]
It took me a while to read, but I love it!
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CountessWaffle [2011-05-12 02:33:48 +0000 UTC]
Wow. This was incredible.... I love it.
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Caretaker-of-Myth [2011-05-11 05:55:54 +0000 UTC]
Lovely work! I'd welcome you to the fandom, but you appear to have gotten a great reception already. XD
And you are a wonderful writer, so I hope you stay with us. Second person is always a risky choice, but it works rather well here, both at putting us in Wheatley's shoes (and he doesn't have any. We're in his nothing; we're in his lack of shoes). and serving as a kind of indication that he's thinking through all of this himself, up in the cold void of space. It's very rambly and more narrative than I usually prefer, but again it makes sense, so I can't fault you for it. Wheatley is quite the rambler.
In fact, the only thing I could say I really dislike about this was how quickly you glossed over my favorite part--Wheatley testing; hurr, hurr. But I understand how that might be difficult to write about. |D
So disappointing about Number Four...poor guy sounded like he didn't deserve it. And Number Five, too. One of the images I've had in my head for a while is Wheatley with one of those five other test subjects, after he/she's "died horrifically," and him curled up over himself (yeah, human!Wheatley is just so much more effective for things like that) and crying because he knows it's all his fault. I can't have been imagining a little bitterness in his voice when he talked about the five in the boss fight, could I...?
"You wanted to go to space and you had that latest fight with Chuck Norris to deal with" <-- I lol'ed.
At any rate--great job of taking us back and fleshing out just why Wheatley hates being called a moron, and why being in control felt so good for him, and how earnest he was the whole time in trying to prove himself, and how sympathetic that makes him. I feel like Valve gave us tantalizing tidbits of that, but never really fleshed it out and showed it to us. You did that, and for that I thank you very much.
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Digi-Writes-Fanfics In reply to Caretaker-of-Myth [2011-05-11 13:07:47 +0000 UTC]
Thank you Caretaker~!
I'm glad second person works so well for this. I'm really a huge fan of writing these rambling, stream-of-conscious type things so I'm glad it worked so well. I'm mostly just glad the voice works-- it all sounds rather bitter and reflective in my head, hence why I was a bit worried it wouldn't suit Wheatley, whom seems like a liiiiitttle bit of a stepford smiler to me on occasion-- that or he's too silly to let a lot of things bother him when they should.
As for glossing over the Wheatley testing, my apologies. XD; I actually glossed over a lot of the game because I was worried this monster was getting too long, but I've had a few people be like WHAT WHERE WAS THIS PART I WANTED TO KNOW MAN so maybe I worried too much. Ah well, that's what MOAR DRABBLES are for.
As for the other test subjects, I do think Wheatley was a little bitter about it. Part of it was probably him going crazy-- he's fully convinced this will upset Chell and throw her off, but mentioning it reminds HIM he's a screw-up and makes it all worse. ...yeah uh that fight makes me sad since it seems to me the stuff he says affects him way more than it affects Chell.
...I have some plans for subject five though, mwahaha. Yay depressing fic ideas.
Anyway, I'm rambling, so thank you very much for the feedback! I highly appreciate it! :3
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papercranes1k [2011-05-10 01:40:12 +0000 UTC]
This was really nice to read. I enjoyed it very much.
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PutterPen [2011-05-09 23:47:13 +0000 UTC]
A deeply emotional story. I felt sorry for those unfortunate test subjects. Especially number 5. I have no idea why that particular part stands out. I think it's some kind of interest and fear of dying alone with no one acknowledging or remembering who you were.
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Digi-Writes-Fanfics In reply to PutterPen [2011-05-10 00:40:46 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad that one stuck out so well. It did for me too while I was writing it, so I'm planning on making another one shot around that.
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HikariOkami [2011-05-09 23:41:20 +0000 UTC]
This is the best written ANYTHING involving Wheatley I've seen on DA (And that's saying something, since I've been chacking for Wheatley stuff twice a day every day since Portal 2 came out.)
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Digi-Writes-Fanfics In reply to EDen-Essence [2011-05-10 00:41:44 +0000 UTC]
Well, that's quite the compliment then. Thank you, I'm glad you felt the need to actually comment!
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souleatergrrl [2011-05-09 22:42:28 +0000 UTC]
Reading this made me think more about Wheatley. It's a bit cute how he kinda liked Chell. I nearly cried at the end, but i'm in class so I have to hold it in.
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Razzek [2011-05-09 22:26:20 +0000 UTC]
Wheatley! Oh, this is fantastic and pretty much holds to everything I believed about him when I played through the game. I was really hoping for some redemption for him and it happened but in the most bittersweet way (which pretty much sums up all of Portal 2 for me after a certain point). I really hope he might get rescued somehow eventually.
This was marvelously written, too. I really like your use of the second tense for most of the story. It's a tricky view point to pull off but it's very immersive here. Well done!
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Galactic-Savior [2011-05-09 19:45:37 +0000 UTC]
I envy your ability to write Wheatley so well. You caught onto things I never did, and it was a fascinating read. Long story, but it flew by in an instant.
This is fantastic work, and EASILY the best Portal fanfic I've ever read.
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Digi-Writes-Fanfics In reply to kaffable [2011-05-09 20:01:29 +0000 UTC]
Aw hey, I found a Hanna fan. Glad to hear this fic came across so well! :3
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Digi-Writes-Fanfics In reply to Ilusien [2011-05-09 20:04:29 +0000 UTC]
Well thank you very much! :3 ...It's kind of sad that I feel proud to be called good sir even though I'm a she, it just sounds so fancy, haha. I'm glad I apparently got Wheatley down so well and I hope you enjoy what I come up with next.
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Nellyington [2011-05-09 18:25:06 +0000 UTC]
Aw! made me cry. Just cause I'm like that :3 x
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GundixD [2011-05-09 17:13:48 +0000 UTC]
My english isn't very well ,but I just love that fan fic! Wheatley is a difficutl character for me..but now it all have a cause and I feel really sorry ,because in the end he were designed for his character.
Very well done job!
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Digi-Writes-Fanfics In reply to GundixD [2011-05-09 20:00:32 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much! :3 I think I get what you're trying to say, so yeah, thank you very much.
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Digi-Writes-Fanfics In reply to DaemonDD [2011-05-09 20:00:08 +0000 UTC]
Aw, wow, seriously? Well, dang. I'm glad it effected so much, I suppose.
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