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WaifuWolffy In reply to divafica [2013-01-21 02:53:44 +0000 UTC]
i kinda wanted to see the unedited one also
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xTintedlullabyx [2015-08-22 04:35:25 +0000 UTC]
This is as beautiful now as it was to me when I read it 2 years ago. I know neither of us have been very active on the site, but I do hope you're still writing. You have a real gift and I'm glad you received the DD - as you are infinitely deserving of it - so others could read your work. If you return to the site and see this, whatever month or year it may be when you do, know that I am and always will be your fan.
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clarissabelle [2013-01-21 05:16:01 +0000 UTC]
This is a beautiful piece of poetry.
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moon-lit-words [2013-01-21 01:19:16 +0000 UTC]
my apologies if the comment is a repeat and for my lack of remembering the technical terminology
at magical joey: the comma after cathedrals is irrelevant because of the following syntactical device: The tourists who knew of the flood took a different route. (compared to) The tourists, who knew of the flood, took a different route.
the comma simply differentiates which tourists are included in the description following the noun 'tourists'. same for cathedrals. writer of this piece would need to place the quality of tinted and such following glass. same for the following stanza
as per grammatical usage, no rudeness intended c:
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Noojie-Woojie [2013-01-21 00:03:35 +0000 UTC]
I love how you used the concept of contradiction in every simile in this piece. Lovely.
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chancerox [2013-01-20 23:54:14 +0000 UTC]
This is so bluntly true, for everyone. Even the fragile things are made of rocks.
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divafica In reply to Euxiom [2013-01-20 21:01:25 +0000 UTC]
Thanks!
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LostGryphin [2013-01-20 16:09:05 +0000 UTC]
wow - stunning - congrats on the DD
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FirstAndLastMen [2013-01-20 11:26:32 +0000 UTC]
i'm sure i've heard this before. i know i have. this has been written before.
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FirstAndLastMen In reply to divafica [2013-01-20 14:20:03 +0000 UTC]
definitely. i have definitely seen this. the part about chalk has been used word for word before. no question
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