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DordtChild — MLSS: Prelude 3-4
Published: 2011-10-09 01:41:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 5181; Favourites: 51; Downloads: 70
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Pages 3 and 4 of the PreludeRing of Obsessions
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Okay this went faster than the other pages so far. Still took me a week to get motivated.
What I like
I really like how the dialog isn't really covering up much of the actual images. I'm happy with positioning over all. I'm normally terrible at them.What I don't like
I can't draw motion worth to save my life. Mainly in the panel of Marron holding back LuigiiOther than that, I like how this set of pages turned out. ^___^
PS - King Carcus Mercoles is Dawn's grandfather who was indeed murdered by Trey
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RIP King Luigii
It's been years since this comic updated.
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^_^ the idea isn't really dead, it's just...extremely out of date
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HE HAS A ANGER PROBLEM BUT THAT DOSENT MATTER BEACUSE SO DO I AND I DO NOT CARE! SO WHEN MY FRIENDS READ IT THEY STARTED LAUGHING AND I WAS LIKE WHAT ABOUT TO START YELLING AND THE WERE LIKE THERES U IN GUY FORM THEN I WAS CONFUSED BUT THEN I GOT IT
(THIS COMMENT WASENT SOUPOST TO BE THIS LONG)
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i swear if i was in there ill go:
Me:cant u guys shut up for 5 minutes and unless if prince luigii shuts it ill have no choice but ........
To free the phsco path (Trey) and Fortuna Free
*shows the key seeing every bodys face frozen*
Me: I could do it now if i have too
Everyone:NOOOOO!!!!!!!
Lerange:*get up laughs nervoulsy* hehe no need to get in of all that
Trey stops laughing and look at me and the key
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tell you the truth on the next two pages it gets super boody rather quickly so about 7 pages into it there's gore XD
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hahahahahahahaXDDXDXDXXD i'm always filled with ideas as i read the story wanting to write it down in a story
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Luigii:she's bluffing!
Me:Really? All right I'll give a domnastion *stars walking to Trey*
Lerange:-runs up- nononononono please there's no need for that!!-almost looking like he was actual begging-
Marron: Luigii are you trying to get us killed!-runs to me-
Sir Lerange and Prince Marron was on begging pession "PLEEEEEEAAAASSSSSEEEEE DON'T PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!
Trey
Luigii: Shut your mouth up!!!!!!!
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try image Sir Lerange and Prince Marron begging right in front of you
XDXDXDXDXDXDXD
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the prisnoer reminds me of a guy named kaioshin weird
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oh he's not going to be in the comic for very much longer XD
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meh hes sotra of a psyho path XD but funny!!!
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though i have i wierd feeling about Sir Lerange plus i feel that prince luigii is being controlled or him and his brother emotions have been switch cause it almost like an alternate univers or something
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XD lol I will...give me some time
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Totally HI-TECHNICAAAAAAL Lol sorry, spazz moment.
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It's a great honor to he beheaded by Prince Luigii's royal hands 
One thing I like: Sir Lerange. His face is really well-made!
Also I like the drawing style and the shadows.
One thing I don't like:
Text is too small!!
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forgot about this but I like how you shade and the comic in black and white looks good. I also like the font you used for the dialog its really neat and easy to read. and I like the updates to the Princes' clothes looks like its easier to draw that way.
also I love the 3rd panel on the 4th page Lerange is just sitting there smug and Luigii's trying to kill him and poor Marron is trying to stop Luigii :3
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Looks like someone has an anger problem... Like me and my main OC. Excellent job!
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god damn it lerange *shakes fist* XD its an awsome page, the expressions are priceless and for the motion with luigii being pulled back i think it worked out nicely, i still dont know how to do it fully but i like the way you do it and the curses in the backround gives a really nice touch ^^
the second to last pannel i think looks awsome, mainly the angle of the room and stuff which is always a great touch
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Lerange is so awsome here i was in tears from laughting.
your humor is just win.
and your motion drawing is actually really good. don't make yourself worse then you actually are.
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Ffft- The panel with Luigii flipping out made me laugh. Really hard. xD
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O.O Those are big hammer bros and Koopas... They look like there the same size or bigger than Marron!
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Well, since Mario is rather short so is Marron
Those are Kooplins, they are a tad bigger than Koopas but they are actually rather wimpy like the mushroom heads (exne the armored Kooplins those guys are tough)
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wait I thought Marron didn't like swearing?
I guess Luigii will have to eat a bar of soap later.
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O.O that means they'd be bigger than me too...
Either way armored or not I still wouldn't want to tick them off
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Poor Marron having to hold back his bro, lerange seems to be enjoying part of it.
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Awesome.
Panel 2 page 4 is my favourite.
I think the motion panel is well done, I could tell what was going on almost instantly. Although, I think (I don't know, you might have tried it and it looked bad) it might have been better if there were connecting lines between his hand and his body.
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:3 Luigii spazzed
and *shrugs* who know Marron was strong enough to stop Luigii, I thought he would of dragged him
*Glomps Lerange*
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you're going to love the next page then XD
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YAY!
*Glomps Marron*
Because I can *runs*
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