PudgieAdopts [2013-11-08 01:05:41 +0000 UTC]
just some things I thought could be improved c:
Shadow Welker (Walker?) (TOTALLY ORIGINAL NAME BRO :I ) (Possible first names relating to dark/shadow Maurus-Late roman, Orpheus- Greek myth)(Power Alaric-ancient germanic, Aldric-french/ancient germanic, Cyneric-anglo-saxon, Kaimana-hawaiian, Ulric-english./ Ulrich-German, French, Ancient Germanic)
Powers (edited some from here on c: also BULLET YOUR POINTS and it's overall more readable)
-Can control shadows, he can morph into shadow related creatures such as ravens, black cats, crows or bats
-Can control electricity -inside the human body and in technology; he can disable them or warp them
-Cape reveals a portal, which takes his enemies to unknown desert where their worst fears materialize around them (get rid of this it makes him to OP)
(powers are too unrelated, pick one and make his abilities based on that)
~EX~Powers are strongest during a full eclipse
-Shadow Control -can create a visual of someone's fear, can use shadows to move himself about
-Shadow Morphing -can manipulate shadows to change his appearance, into usable weapons, or for defense
-Shadow Manipulation -Uses shadows to control other living beings (maybe he gets this when he's older? because it would take a lot of training of the power previously listed to control others?)(I think I'm gonna make a villain with these powers now c: )
Works alone, sometimes allied with the H.I.V.E. or Slade (Don't make him work with Deathstroke plz it's WAY TOO OVERDONE)
Species: *insert species here*
Planet: *Galaxy, Planet* 17 galaxies from StarFire's home planet, his planet was destroyed so apparently he is the last 4 Shadekic..He very much despises Teen Titans especially StarFire.
(Why and how was the world destroyed? Find/make up a galaxy name and planet name. Other than powers what's distinctive about his race? Why does he hate Starfire SPECIFICALLY? What happened to his family? )
His personal mission is control various planets and their inhabitants (Again WHY?)
Weakness: water on his right arm disables the "Force" (such an original power name), Plastic affects ability to control electricity (wtf ._. how? also get rid of the first one they're BS. instead why not have his control over what ever have a 30 yd range? if shadow-user, his power is very weak during the day. if electric then when would plastic effect his powers?)
Could you hide those last comments please c: I derped
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demonreaperchick [2013-11-08 01:02:15 +0000 UTC]
Shadow Welker (Walker?) (TOTALLY ORIGINAL NAME BRO) (Possible first names relating to dark/shadow Maurus-Late roman, Orpheus- Greek myth)(Power Alaric-ancient germanic, Aldric-french/ancient germanic, Cyneric-anglo-saxon, Kaimana-hawaiian, Ulric-english./ Ulrich-German, French, Ancient Germanic)
Powers (edited some from here on c: also BULLET YOUR POINTS and it's overall more readable)
-Can control shadows, he can morph into shadow related creatures such as ravens, black cats, crows or bats
-Can control electricity -inside the human body and in technology; he can disable them or warp them
-Cape reveals a portal, which takes his enemies to unknown desert where their worst fears materialize around them (get rid of this it makes him to OP)
(powers are too unrelated, pick one and make his abilities based on that)
~EX~Powers are strongest during a full eclipse
-Shadow Control -can create a visual of someone's fear, can use shadows to move himself about
-Shadow Morphing -can manipulate shadows to change his appearance, into usable weapons, or for defense
-Shadow Manipulation -Uses shadows to control other living beings (maybe he gets this when he's older? because it would take a lot of training of the power previously listed to control others?)(I think I'm gonna make a villain with these powers now c: )
Works alone, sometimes allied with the H.I.V.E. or Slade (Don't make him work with Deathstroke plz it's WAY TOO OVERDONE)
Species: *insert species here*
Planet: *Galaxy, Planet* 17 galaxies from StarFire's home planet, his planet was destroyed so apparently he is the last 4 Shadekic..He very much despises Teen Titans especially StarFire.
(Why and how was the world destroyed? Find/make up a galaxy name and planet name. Other than powers what's distinctive about his race? Why does he hate Starfire SPECIFICALLY? What happened to his family? )
His personal mission is control various planets and their inhabitants (Again WHY?)
Weakness: water on his right arm disables the "Force" (such an original power name), Plastic affects ability to control electricity (wtf ._. how? also get rid of the first one they're BS. instead why not have his control over what ever have a 30 yd range? if shadow-user, his power is very weak during the day. if electric then when would plastic effect his powers? )
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