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MyNameIsZura [2011-10-22 05:08:22 +0000 UTC]

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Hey-o. Sorry for taking so long to do this. My critique won't be as good as ~MadKeeper 's, but oh well. ANYWAY. ONTO IMPROVEMENT.

Well first off I'd like to say that overall the picture looks sleek and neat. It has a kinda... Cartoony look that I'm diggin'. I really love the way you drew the hands. LOVE it.

As for the fedora... I looks a bit flat. And if you actually look at pictures of fedoras, you can see that part of the brim folds up.

I think the other big issue that I see is the shoulders and the way the shirt fits ONTO his shoulders. In this picture here, you seem to have the shirt kinda floating off his shoulders. Look in the mirror at your shirt-it is directly onto your skin. However, it is good that you actually put some depth into the clothing; meaning, it's loose on the body... It's kinda hard trying to word what I'm saying there, sorry....

As for the shoulders, draw them at a less drastic slope. Again, if you look in the mirror and study your framework, you'll notice that while shouldrs do indeed slope downwards a bit, it isn't dramatic.

Oh, and the orange belly-stripe should probably start in the middle of his chest or near is collarbones, or go all the way to the end of his bottom lip; because the way you have it now looks a tad awkward.

So, in recap, here's what needs to be fixed: the hat, the neck of the shirt, the shoulders, and the orange underbelly near the mouth.

Other then those things it's a really great piece. The longer I look at it, the better I like it. And sorry if I sounded mean, I'm just trying to be helpful e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a… " width="19" height="19" alt="" title="Sweating a little..."/>

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MadMeeper [2011-10-07 06:19:30 +0000 UTC]

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(Ignore the ratings, I'm just putting all 5 stars cuz I dont want to think about it too much. xD)


Tegu-Dragon? That's awesome. :'D I didn't know about the tegu part! Makes me like this guy a whole lot more <333

SO Actually I made a redline for you, I'll use it to illustrate what I'm saying! It can be found here: [link] There are 5 panels, so I'll be referring to them from left to right as 1,2,3,4, and 5. Keep in mind though that I do not by any means claim to be an anatomy expert, I'm just sharing what I know. xD

First off, in panels 1 and 2, Its really best to draw out the body underneath something with clothes so you get a good feel to where the clothes even lie! I'm not sure if you did that or not but either way its good to do. You don't even have to lineart it; just make sure the sketch is good. As far as anatomy goes, it's really helpful to reference humans, especially for anthros and anything similar. I find circles in place of major muscles especially helpful if you can see what I've done. You have to keep in mind that your dragon WILL have some pectoral muscles, will have a ribcage, and will have a belly! I've drawn a little toe for you just to show how you can make the claw look connected. It is rather hard but once you get the hang of it it'll come naturally. I would say look at some dragon artists that you like and see how they draw claws! Some good people in my opinion are =Shinerai , =skysealer , *neondragon , etc! Doesn't mean you copy, just see what they do and try and tell if you can learn something from it.

Now for clothes. Once you have your anatomy sketched out the way you want it to be it is a whole lot easier to tell where clothes fall. I have them there for you in panels 3,4, and 5 so you can see how that works compared to what you have. Don't forget about wrinkles and the like, some parts of clothes hug the body better than others, so pick carefully what kinds of clothes he's wearing! It'll change a lot of things. Also, something I discovered about reptiles and hats, it's really hard to get it just right the way you have it. Because of the strange head shape, I think the best way to do it is to have the perspective tilting up and having the hat rest on the back of the head. Doesn't mean that he can't tilt it down, but it's the only spot on the head realistically that it'll fit. Practice that a bit! I even had a hard time doing it in the redline, it's not easy but you can do it~

Also don't forget to add things like pocket linings, maybe even some thread lines. Of course, use a smaller brush size to add some depth! I didn't do that here but you can do it when linearting.

One more thing I didn't put in the redilne, if you're having trouble with the head perspective, draw it as if it were a cardboard box first! I mean it, make a rectangle for a head and work from there. xD Don't forget that eyebrows on reptiles poke up from their head! Tilt the bottom of the eye in the direction that the head box is facing, that should help out a little bit with perspective.

Basically, use a ton of guidelines, erase, reference, try again until you get things right! I can tell you from experience that when you're learning how to draw things that paying attention to details is very important. Even if it takes a really long time eventually it'll become second nature and you'll be able to combine speed with skill. Until then be patient and work out every little thing. Hope this helped! If you have questions you know you can ask~

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MyNameIsZura [2011-10-07 02:09:40 +0000 UTC]

teguuuuuuuuu ill do a hardcore critique if you promise you wont get mad at me or anything

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lionsandyellowcake [2011-10-06 14:10:04 +0000 UTC]

That makes it a cowboy hat.

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lionsandyellowcake [2011-10-06 14:09:50 +0000 UTC]

But but... it's a pancake fedora lol.

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TevoSilverfox [2011-10-06 13:37:13 +0000 UTC]

Awesome bud

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