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H.P. Lovecraft's The Tomb (for beginning readers).Pages 38-39
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The verse feels off because you've split up the lines, i.e. "and STRAIGHT to a DOOR" is on its own line.
The structure of "There was one day" and "when somebody seeking a thrill" feels off.
Suggestion:
"there was ONE sing-le DAY
when a STRANG-er sought THRILL
and acc-OMP-an-ied ME" …
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