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DumbBlond101 — Zoeya's Nightmares
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Description "Um…Rythian?" said the apprentice/mushroom enthusiast nervously as her teacher searches his bag for the next item he wanted to make. He looked up at her "Hm? What is it Zoeya?" "Do you have any magical thingy that you can make for dreams?" she asked shuffling her feet in the ground. "Um….why do you want to know this?" Rythian asked wondering why Zoeya would want such an odd thing. "Uh, no reason, never mind" Zoeya says before flying off with her magic ring he had given her. He sighed  and went back to creating thinking about Zoeya.

Zoeya always acted odd and kinda childish around everyone but this was new to him. He had never seen her act that odd to him. Come to think of it she had been acting odd for a few days now. She always had a tired look on her face that she tried to cover up with a smile; she hadn't set foot in her farm for almost a day now which made Rythian worried the most. "Is Zoeya sick?" Rythian muttered to himself.    

Zoeya had flown out of the house and into the woods she had created around the castle.
She sat on top of one of the trees and tried to shake off the tiredness that was trying to overtake her. "No…can't sleep, the nightmare will come back" She muttered.
Zoeya jumped down from the tree and slowly walked to her farm. She saw their guardian Teep on her way there "Oh, hey Teep" She said trying to be cheerful. The little green dinosaur nodded happy to see her but then gets a worried look on his face when he sees how weak she looked. "I'm fine Teep, nothing to worry about" She said in a non-convincing voice. Teep looked at her one last time and then nodded and continues his circle of the perimeter.

Zoeya sighed glad she had convinced him she was fine. She was far from fine but she didn't want the others to know. She headed over to her cows to see how they were doing when the world around her started spinning. "Whoa, I don't feel so good" Zoeya leaned on the gate to the pin as she gets a massive headache. "Ahhh, this hurts so much!" Zoeya said with her hands clutched to her head. Zoeya tried to fight the headache but collapse on the floor unconscious.

Teep who had finished another circle of the castle perimeter goes over to check to see how Zoeya's cows are doing and sees Zoeya unconscious on the ground. He started to panic as soon as he saw her on the ground and runs into the castle to get Rythian. Teep ran inside and jumps Rythian. "Whoa Teep, you have to be careful!" Rythian said as he puts his sword away. Teep bounces up and down scared wishing he could speak. "What Teep is something wrong?" Rythian asked. Teep nods rapidly and runs out the front door. Rythian followed with his sword out prepared for any intruders that had attacked the castle.
Rythian goes around the side of the castle and saw Zoeya laying on the ground with Teep looking over her. "Oh God no." Rythian rushed over and knelt next to Zoeya "Zoeya! Zoeya can you hear me!" Rythian asked as he shook Zoeya. Zoeya groaned and Rythian sighed relieved that she was ok. He picked Zoeya up in his arms "Thank you Teep for coming to get me. Keep watch, I don't want anyone getting to us while I take care of her" Rythian said walking back towards the house. Teep nodded his head and stands guard ready for anything.  

Inside the castle Rythian had taken Zoeya up to the bedroom and laid her on the bed. He sits next to the bed and waits for her to wake up. After many hours Rythian had dozed off but wakes up to the sound of Zoeya whimpering until she bolts up screaming. Rythian right away rushes to her side as she scans the room. "Are you alright Zoeya?"  Rythian asked as he tried to comfort her. "Ye…ya I'm fine, what happened? The last thing I remember is getting a really bad headache and the world started spinning" Zoeya said as she tried to remember the missing time. "Teep found you, you had blacked out or something. Mind telling me what happened?" Rythian asked sitting on the bed.

Zoeya shook her head defiantly. "Zoeya, you have to tell me what happened…..Are you sick? Because you have been acting odd for a few days now and I want to know why." Zoeya sighed "I've been having nightmares of the war" "You mean the one between Duncan and Sjin that almost killed everyone?" Rythian asked. Zoeya shook her head "No, it's the war to come……you get killed at the end" Zoeya said as she started to get teary eyes. "Whoa hey, I'm a very powerful wizard, you don't have to worry about me" Rythian said trying to get Zoeya not to cry. "They used me to get to you since I'm not as strong as you" Zoeya said as tears streamed down her face. "Hey, look at me" Rythian said as he lifted Zoeya's chin up to his. "I would never let anyone take you away as a prisoner. You are part of my family now along with Teep and all our creations." Zoeya had started to cry again and hugged Rythian.

"Gah, why are you still crying? I thought that would make you happy!" Rythian said surprised by Zoeya's hug. "I am, but you've never called me family!" Rythian sighed happy that Zoeya happy again. "Hey it's getting dark out we should go to bed." Rythian said.

Zoeya let Rythian go and nodded as she wiped away her tears. "Are you going to be in here?" Zoeya asked. "Uh, ya sure as long as you stay on your side" Rythia proclaimed as he blushed under his mask he always kept on his face.
"Right, there won't be any funny business" Zoeya said as she took off her armor and boots and set it next to her sword next to the bed. Rythian does the same and gets into the bed as Zoeya does the same. "Good night Rythian" Zoeya said with a yawn. "Good night Zoeya."

Rythian quickly fell asleep dreaming about the day he would show Sjin who was really the boss but is woken up by a strange feeling. He looked over and saw that Zoeya wasn't there. "Zoeya?" he asked looking around the room.
He doesn't see her so he put on his armor and starts to look for her. Outside the castle in the pouring rain Zoeya sat under a tree trying to calm her nerves down. She had had another nightmare but it wasn't about the war. It was about Rythian trying to kick her out of the castle and then trying to kill her. This dream made Zoeya think of Rythian in a completely different way. "He wouldn't do that to me, we're family…..he…he needs me right?" Zoeya said to herself.

Zoeya then hears something moving and pulled out her sword "Who goes there? Show yourself!" "Oh thank God, Zoeya I've been looking everywhere for you!" said Rythian as he landed next to her from flying all around the area. "You shouldn't have come to find me Rythian, just go away" Zoeya said as she turned away from Rythian. Rythian stood in the rain in shock. Zoeya had never told him to leave her alone before. "Zoeya are you alright? Did something happen?"  Zoeya nodded still faced away from Rythian.
"Did you have another nightmare?" Rythian asked. Zoeya slowly nodded and Rythian sighed "Listen, we just went over this. I'm not going to let you get kidnapped." "It wasn't that" Zoeya said interrupting Rythian. "It wasn't? Then what was it?" "Something much worst" Zoeya said sadly. "Something worse than me dying?" Rythian said surprised. Zoeya nodded "What could be worse than that?" He asked wanting to know. "You trying to kill me" Zoeya said quietly. "Care to explain how that happened?" Rythian asked worried.

Zoeya nodded and leaned on the tree looking at the ground "I messed up one of our magical things and the whole first level of the house was covered in lava, I tried to fix it but it just made you angrier at me. You started yelling at me…..calling me a useless mushroom lover and told me to get out. I tried reasoning with you when you pulled out you're super strong sword and swung it at me. I woke up after that, terrified so I came out here….you don't think I useless do you?" "Of course not, I'm fine when you make mistakes" "But….I make them a lot. I mean just a few days ago I accidently set fire to the hilltop while putting up the torches!" "Hey, I'm ok with your mistakes, it means you're learning" Rythian said. "But I am completely useless to you. You got all the magic stuff to do everything that I do" Zoeya said sadly. "No there is one thing I can't create with magic" Rythian said taking ahold of Zoeya's hand "Wh…what is that?" she asked.

Rythian pulled Zoeya close to him into a hug and whispered into her ear. "You" Zoeya stared at her master confused "I can make guards, I can make towers, I can make weapons but I can't replace you." Zoeya smiled brightly at him "You..you really mean that Rythian?" She asked. "Of course I do, you are my best friend. You're family to me, after all we have been through I've started to sorta care about you" Rythian said blushing. "So you would never try and throw me out of the castle or try and kill me?" Zoeya asked still nervous about it. "I have killed many things in my life here with no regret but if I ever threw you out or tried to kill you I would never forgive myself" Rythian said her blue eyes staring into her wood brown eyes.

Zoeya hugged Rythian and he hugged her back but as they are hugging Rythian hears light snoring. He looked down and sees Zoeya had fallen asleep.  Rythian chuckled to himself and carried Zoeya back into the castle into the bed room knowing she wouldn't be having nightmares anymore.
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Comments: 83

DumbBlond101 In reply to ??? [2015-09-09 10:59:28 +0000 UTC]

thanks
if I did more rythian stories but with someone else would you read it?

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AliceInWonderWorlds In reply to DumbBlond101 [2015-10-11 21:50:08 +0000 UTC]

oh of course i would, i would love it

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DumbBlond101 In reply to AliceInWonderWorlds [2015-10-11 23:44:48 +0000 UTC]

awesome.
I'll start writing that as soon as my friend starts my other comic hopefully

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AliceInWonderWorlds In reply to DumbBlond101 [2015-10-17 22:42:30 +0000 UTC]

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY MY HYPE LEVELS ARE THROUGH THE ROOF

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shadowdoom10 [2015-09-03 13:46:35 +0000 UTC]

Awwwwwww

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DumbBlond101 In reply to shadowdoom10 [2015-09-03 18:53:54 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Stuffedlion [2014-06-22 16:03:02 +0000 UTC]

  Zoethian

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Rythiansapprentice [2014-01-28 21:46:48 +0000 UTC]

This story was great! You should make another one.

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DumbBlond101 In reply to Rythiansapprentice [2014-01-28 23:19:32 +0000 UTC]

I haven't really been wanting to make one since they haven't made a episode for SO long and Zoey isn't really single anymore

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Rythiansapprentice In reply to DumbBlond101 [2014-01-29 00:25:20 +0000 UTC]

That is true... But still it would be a good read

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DumbBlond101 In reply to Rythiansapprentice [2014-01-29 00:42:48 +0000 UTC]

maybe


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shovel88 In reply to DumbBlond101 [2014-07-10 19:38:45 +0000 UTC]

yeah more good reads like this and i will fav you,:3 because i cried because zoey had to face that   

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DumbBlond101 In reply to shovel88 [2014-07-10 20:00:54 +0000 UTC]

ok

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earbudkitty [2013-08-06 23:43:28 +0000 UTC]

Amazing!

Some constructive criticism:

Make sure that, whenever a different person is talking, the sentence starts on the next line. (I realise my description of that is weird, so if you understand it, great! If not i can try to put it better into words)

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DumbBlond101 In reply to earbudkitty [2013-08-07 16:30:10 +0000 UTC]

ya I know

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TheMidnightShadows [2013-07-31 08:29:21 +0000 UTC]

Before I start, I just want to say Rythian and Zoey are so cute and I could almost HEAR their voices through your writing.
There are a few errors, but even if a writer rereads his/her work thousands of times, there will always be a typo. I suggest getting a friend to read it and mark where you made mistakes, then rereading it yourself until you feel comfortable with it.
Also, take breaks. It refreshes your mind so you might catch something you didn't before. If you have an idea right before your break, write it down as a side note in as much detail as you can, then come back to it. It'll probably improve the detail of the idea, if not add to it.
Now, with what ~Nox1468 said about past and present tense, I won't nag you about it because I have SO MANY problems with past and present tense, I have no right to (also I didn't notice them, that's how bad I am with it). Taking breaks should fix the missing words, along with getting a friend to proofread. If you can't, OH WELL.
Also, a few things to consider:
1) Consider word choice while proofreading. If something sounds like it's repeating, that means it is. Trust yourself when writing. I suggest using online thesauruses A LOT. They are wonderful.
2) Dialog is confusing. It always is and always will be. It's easier for the writer (usually) and the reader to read when it's separated correctly. It may look like you are taking up lots of space, but if someone complains you can say, "At least it's correct." Unless you ask for more information, I won't nag you with how it should look. You seem very intelligent and not ignorant with writing just by the way you write, so I will assume you know how it should be separated.

You are an AMAZING writer, and I applaud you for a valiant effort and a very impressive and emotionally moving fan-fiction. I hope there is more coming in the future, and I do not intend for this comment to be degrading or condescending. I just want to further your knowledge, give you a few ideas, and praise you for a job well done. I will now give you an electronic hug, because you've earned it.

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DumbBlond101 In reply to TheMidnightShadows [2013-07-31 21:07:28 +0000 UTC]

thanks

this was made before I took a writing class at school

I was thinking of writing another Zoey/Rythian or maybe  Lomadia/Xephos

I don't know

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TheMidnightShadows In reply to DumbBlond101 [2013-08-06 15:15:19 +0000 UTC]

Go for it.

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DumbBlond101 In reply to TheMidnightShadows [2013-08-06 22:02:50 +0000 UTC]

yay

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Bluegummybears [2013-07-28 16:26:04 +0000 UTC]

cute ^_^ they are the best couple <3 

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DumbBlond101 In reply to Bluegummybears [2013-07-28 17:22:49 +0000 UTC]

ya they are

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cassielovestosing [2013-07-26 22:01:00 +0000 UTC]

D'aww!!! Mah feels are yours!!

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DumbBlond101 In reply to cassielovestosing [2013-07-27 19:03:46 +0000 UTC]

lol thanks

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EmberTheDragonlord [2013-07-26 11:12:01 +0000 UTC]

No other words for it, beautiful

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DumbBlond101 In reply to EmberTheDragonlord [2013-07-27 19:03:40 +0000 UTC]

thanks x3

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SnapshotMew [2013-07-25 15:54:25 +0000 UTC]

This is absolutely adorable!!! Daaawww! You are such an awesome writer.

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DumbBlond101 In reply to SnapshotMew [2013-07-25 19:29:34 +0000 UTC]

thanks

I'm really glad you like it

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zoeythianftw [2013-07-25 05:28:17 +0000 UTC]

Omg this is so good when did you upload this???

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DumbBlond101 In reply to zoeythianftw [2013-07-25 19:28:26 +0000 UTC]

about two months ago

love the Ester icon

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rottylover321 [2013-07-24 18:59:49 +0000 UTC]

I LOVE IT SO MUCH!!!!!!!!

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DumbBlond101 In reply to rottylover321 [2013-07-24 19:17:17 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Jumpingjalepenos [2013-07-24 08:36:46 +0000 UTC]

Love this.

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DumbBlond101 In reply to Jumpingjalepenos [2013-07-24 16:47:39 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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sunblaze32 [2013-07-24 07:30:56 +0000 UTC]

This is great.

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DumbBlond101 In reply to sunblaze32 [2013-07-24 16:47:43 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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ZekiBean [2013-07-24 06:38:06 +0000 UTC]

Love it. Keep up the good work.

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DumbBlond101 In reply to ZekiBean [2013-07-24 16:46:53 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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ZekiBean In reply to DumbBlond101 [2013-07-25 20:55:58 +0000 UTC]

No problem.

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RabidRabbit190 [2013-07-24 04:52:43 +0000 UTC]

AWWW!! That was so cute! 

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DumbBlond101 In reply to RabidRabbit190 [2013-07-24 16:45:50 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Unique-Brushstrokes [2013-07-24 03:46:14 +0000 UTC]

This is really adorable there's only a few spelling and grammatical errors, but a good proof reader can fix those (: Keep up the good work ^^

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DumbBlond101 In reply to Unique-Brushstrokes [2013-07-24 16:46:45 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Nox1468 [2013-07-24 03:41:42 +0000 UTC]

great story, though you may want to do a bit or proofreading, there were a few times when you were missing a word here and there, you forgot some punctuation, and you had a habit of swapping between present-tense and past-tense quite often. still, don't worry, it can all be fixed with a minute or two of re-reading it

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DumbBlond101 In reply to Nox1468 [2013-07-24 16:46:03 +0000 UTC]

thanks

ya I will

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ManztheFanGirl [2013-07-24 03:20:47 +0000 UTC]

Is it possible for me to Favorite more than once? If so can someone tell me? PLEAAASE?! This fanfiction is too good for one favorite!!

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DumbBlond101 In reply to ManztheFanGirl [2013-07-24 16:45:10 +0000 UTC]

Really?

thanks

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ManztheFanGirl In reply to DumbBlond101 [2013-07-24 18:25:28 +0000 UTC]

no problem~! 

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ThePikachuishere [2013-07-24 01:51:24 +0000 UTC]

It is SO AMAZING! I love it! Zoey and Rythian are my favorite characters in the yogscast and you made them so much better!! ;D

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DumbBlond101 In reply to ThePikachuishere [2013-07-24 16:45:44 +0000 UTC]

lol thanks

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roachify [2013-07-24 01:43:33 +0000 UTC]

This is perfect. 

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