Comments: 16
iliketurnips [2005-02-24 13:57:48 +0000 UTC]
oh my Jess that was beautiful. was on the verge of tears but then the stupid phone rang and spoilt the whole moment.
Love Sarah
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MasterOfMonster [2004-07-01 11:49:19 +0000 UTC]
A beautifully sad tale,now im crying my makeup off :-p
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davidrussell [2004-03-20 01:15:56 +0000 UTC]
sup Jess
"I had always heard that your entire life flashes before your eyes the second before you die. Only that one second, isn't a second at all, it seems to stretch out forever like an ocean of time."
-- Lester Burnham, American Beauty
That's what I was reminded of when I read this.
You've created a feeling of sympathy and mystery with the character. Sympathy for Isaac, knowing that he is about to die; and mystery in that we do not know the reason for his death, we're only told what is relevant from Isaac's current outlook on (what's left of) his life.
I like it. It makes me wonder what I'll be thinking about just before I die, and maybe whether I'd actually realise that I was about to die.
Write more.
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DyingDreams In reply to davidrussell [2004-03-21 10:46:40 +0000 UTC]
fanking u muchness sir russ (or brain) I like that quote reminds me of that too
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DyingDreams In reply to davidrussell [2004-03-21 13:00:16 +0000 UTC]
lol it sure is you can be sir brain if you want.
I am very proud to be the owner of such a comment
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davidrussell In reply to DyingDreams [2004-03-21 13:32:57 +0000 UTC]
Sir Kerr is even better, as then it rhymes.
Also, K is a cool letter. As far as letters go, that is.
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chiroptera [2004-03-19 13:44:39 +0000 UTC]
i'm sad.. this is an awful piece.. but it is so close to the heart.. full of hidden emotions.. i wish you had some form of paragraphing though.. great job..
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DyingDreams In reply to chiroptera [2004-03-21 13:20:00 +0000 UTC]
I will admit paragraphing isnt my strong point
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kanuci [2004-03-15 17:23:42 +0000 UTC]
That is bootfiul jessapo
you go girl!
Love u
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DyingDreams [2004-03-13 23:59:21 +0000 UTC]
aw thank you muchness
Im sleepy now i go sleep
xxxx
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slave2myaddiction [2004-03-13 10:59:25 +0000 UTC]
Yay for Jessie
That is amazing good,
go you!!!
*snuggers*
xxxxLauraxxxx
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