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Description Isaac felt the warm, familiar hand of someone he loved squeezing his. He could hear their soft voices talking to him. He was scared and in so much pain, sometimes it was hard to think of anything else. He knew he had had been getting sleepier lately. As he lay there he remembered all the wonderful happy memories he had hidden away in his head, maybe his life had been short but at least it had been filled with love not everybody had that.
He remembered how excited he had been when his sister was born. she was so small and delicate. He had been scared to hold and for a while he had just stood and gazed at her perfect little face. When she was bigger he would spend hours playing her favourite games and making up long exciting stories while she sat enthralled hanging on to her big brother’s every word.
He couldn’t open his eyes now, they were just so heavy.
He remembered the last time he was outside , they had taken him in a wheelchair to that beautiful garden. A narrow winding path followed a tiny stream to the bottom, surrounded by so many amazing colours and smells. He hadn’t wanted to leave. That night he had gazed out of his window, the sky had been unusually clear and he could see the hundreds upon thousands of stars, one particularly bright one had stood out to him , shining down on his bed like a guardian angel.
His breathe was getting quicker now.
He began to remember the day he met his best friend. It was on his first day at school, He’d had the horrible nervous feeling in his chest like waiting for the dentist. He had clung to his mummy‘s leg but eventually she had had to leave and he had stood shyly by himself watching the other louder children until Sam had timidly crept up to him and said hello. After that they were inseparable, he hoped he wouldn’t be too sad without him.
It was hard to concentrate on the voices now, they seemed to be getting fainter like he was hearing them far away down a long tunnel .
Then he remembered the day he had built that amazing, enormous sandcastle, how proud he had been that they had built it together. He recalled how clear the sea had been and how the sun made it glisten like millions of diamonds.
It was almost time to go now, he could feel it, he hoped his mum and his dad and his sister would be okay, that’d they’d look after each other and laugh at the happy memories they had of all of them together, that his friends would remember his forever.
He thought back to his first pet, Rosie, A tiny puppy that he had played with and cared for. Her fur had felt like silk against his face, he remembered the intense sadness he had felt when Rosie had died.
Now it was time for him to go, he was scared he tried desperately to speak, to say goodbye and tell his family that he would miss them but it was too hard, he just didn’t have the energy anymore.
Finally he took his last shaky breath and was immersed in darkness. But he could see a light, a tiny light, it was growing, coming ever closer and from it came the most beautiful and pure creature he had ever seen. A perfect yet ancient face, eyes that looked inside a person and saw everything and wing, immense and powerful. Slowly the angel bent over to kiss him and Isaac felt all the pain he had suffered slipping away. He was released from the indignity and the hurting of the past few months. The angel extended one white slender hand and Isaac took it so he could move on to the next place, where his beloved Rosie was waiting patiently for him.
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Comments: 16

iliketurnips [2005-02-24 13:57:48 +0000 UTC]

oh my Jess that was beautiful. was on the verge of tears but then the stupid phone rang and spoilt the whole moment.

Love Sarah

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DragonLily4 [2004-07-12 19:32:50 +0000 UTC]

Very sad....but it gives you a sense of hope at the end....very well written.
Peace be with you
HUGS!
Lindsey

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MasterOfMonster [2004-07-01 11:49:19 +0000 UTC]

A beautifully sad tale,now im crying my makeup off :-p

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davidrussell [2004-03-20 01:15:56 +0000 UTC]

sup Jess

"I had always heard that your entire life flashes before your eyes the second before you die. Only that one second, isn't a second at all, it seems to stretch out forever like an ocean of time."
-- Lester Burnham, American Beauty

That's what I was reminded of when I read this.

You've created a feeling of sympathy and mystery with the character. Sympathy for Isaac, knowing that he is about to die; and mystery in that we do not know the reason for his death, we're only told what is relevant from Isaac's current outlook on (what's left of) his life.

I like it. It makes me wonder what I'll be thinking about just before I die, and maybe whether I'd actually realise that I was about to die.

Write more.

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DyingDreams In reply to davidrussell [2004-03-21 10:46:40 +0000 UTC]

fanking u muchness sir russ (or brain) I like that quote reminds me of that too

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davidrussell In reply to DyingDreams [2004-03-21 10:56:47 +0000 UTC]

You're very much the welcome

You were the proud reciever of the first comment I have made since January 28th. That's almost two months, or so my digital watch tells me.


ps, Sir Russ is an ace name.

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DyingDreams In reply to davidrussell [2004-03-21 13:00:16 +0000 UTC]

lol it sure is you can be sir brain if you want.
I am very proud to be the owner of such a comment

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davidrussell In reply to DyingDreams [2004-03-21 13:32:57 +0000 UTC]

Sir Kerr is even better, as then it rhymes.

Also, K is a cool letter. As far as letters go, that is.

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DyingDreams In reply to davidrussell [2004-03-21 14:17:45 +0000 UTC]

yes it is rather magnificent

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chiroptera [2004-03-19 13:44:39 +0000 UTC]

i'm sad.. this is an awful piece.. but it is so close to the heart.. full of hidden emotions.. i wish you had some form of paragraphing though.. great job..

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DyingDreams In reply to chiroptera [2004-03-21 13:20:00 +0000 UTC]

I will admit paragraphing isnt my strong point

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kanuci [2004-03-15 17:23:42 +0000 UTC]

That is bootfiul jessapo
you go girl!
Love u

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DyingDreams [2004-03-13 23:59:21 +0000 UTC]

aw thank you muchness
Im sleepy now i go sleep
xxxx

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slave2myaddiction [2004-03-13 10:59:25 +0000 UTC]

Yay for Jessie
That is amazing good,
go you!!!
*snuggers*
xxxxLauraxxxx

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klark-kent [2004-03-13 10:25:54 +0000 UTC]

Jess that is ssssssssssssoooooooooooooo great. I was all shivery all the way through that, you should write more stuff like that and post it.

I love the imagery and i really like the way its written, gives a feel of elegance. Uber cool.

:snuckug: .

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krun [2004-03-12 22:20:13 +0000 UTC]

That is really good and so sad and heartfelt
See you really are good at writing essays, you just need to be more confident about ur abilities. u are a very talented (and of course extremely gorgeous) young woman

i love you

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