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DyingInYou — Acid Fix
Published: 2005-04-16 20:10:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 93; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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She loved him too muchTo ever say goodbye
Now 4 years later
She's due to die
Acid in her veins
Knives at her chest
Scars that never leave
Bruises that never fade
Words hurt too
Though so much worse
She'd rather take knives and acid
Then deal with the words
Coke and herion shortly did the job
Weed wasn't an option
Suicide wasn't neither
She didn't really understand
That those needles she needed
She tried rehab
But it only got worse
She couldn't handle withdrawal
So she checked herself out
Now she's back in the alleyways
Slowly getting her fix
She goes from one druggie to another
Not caring for precaution
No one can help her
And she refuses to be fixed
All she wanted was his love
And it was too much to ask
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Comments: 10
Well, I recommend at least trying some more authors. You dont need to listen to me, because you're your own person. I'm just making some recommendations, because I know people's recommendations have helped me. You might enjoy Emily Dickinson. She's not really my kind of poet, but she writes similarly to you. Read her, and try to learn something from her.
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I have many more poems that I plan on posting... none of them are good though. So, feel free to be disappointed. And thanks for adding me!
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I wont be disappointed at all. There is something I like about your poetry, and that's why I'm here. Keep it up, and write, write, write, write. Express yourself and get lost in your work. Your work will blossom.
Regards,
Fionn
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I understand, and it's great for that, but poetry is art. Great art is the result of great ideas and hard work to make those great ideas into something unique.
Which poets do you read?
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I dun really read any. I love Edgar Allen Poe though. I adore his work.
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I dun really read any. I love Edgar Allen Poe though. I adore his work.
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Sorry to say this is the best I could do when its just coming from my mind.
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I think it has great potential, but needs a big editing job. Your age is far too evident in your choice of words and images, and with a more experienced use of words it could be great. It's too much like the speech heard from 14 year olds every day, and doesnt express anything new.
This work could be great!
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I dont think thats offensive, it seems to speak on a lot of levels about life. well done for conveying it so well
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