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Mutitus [2013-08-27 18:54:15 +0000 UTC]
Same as before.
I hope that my comments do not discourage you. I realize that the errors I'm picking out are all present because you hadn't gotten the advice prior. I can only hope that they will help you in writing future pieces, which I will gladly look over for you as well if you wish.
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EagleNut In reply to Mutitus [2013-08-31 15:17:44 +0000 UTC]
Don't worry about me, while nobody enjoys having their flaws pointed out, I realize that I need someone to show me where I gotta improve. I'll gladly take future critiques as I finish more of these battles/stories. Perhaps even go on my own journey in the Sinnoh region, depending on how well these go
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Mutitus In reply to EagleNut [2013-09-07 15:10:45 +0000 UTC]
Excellent; I look forward to seeing where your works take you next.
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EagleNut In reply to Mutitus [2013-09-28 17:37:13 +0000 UTC]
Okay, so I've been working on part 3 and I'm trying to follow your advice. However, I'm having difficulty trying to switch perspectives. Any advice/tips for that?
Honestly, I didn't expect you to go and read the Pokémon USA thing. I mean, yes, there are few settings using the US and I would like to see more of those, but I hadn't planned on actually using the Pokè USA plot. You are correct in that I need to expand the setting more, something that I hope I will correct in the next segment.
In a way, this is a prelude to a series I plan on starting about a journey in the Sinnoh region, something I had hoped to address in the final chapter of this mini-saga. I'm just trying to figure out how best to do that, so if you have any tips for that as well, I'll gladly listen.
Is there any way I could send you a copy of my draft for a quick review before uploading? I'm not very technologically competent, so it's probably something obvious that I just haven't seen.
Again, thanks for your help in all of this.
From your Nutty Buddy,
The Eagle Nut
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Mutitus In reply to EagleNut [2013-09-29 14:02:40 +0000 UTC]
When switching perspectives, it can be a bit difficult to say the least, but the most effective way is to simply commit a sudden break. What I mean by this is that you can simply switch perspectives whenever you want. A character could see something or tell its Pokemon to perform a move, and then the perspective can be immediately switched to that of the Pokemon. You don't require any fancy transitions or anything; a clean break, no matter how crude it may be, is still a clean break.
I suppose the best thing I could do is give you my e-mail address, but I would have to send it to you by note.
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