Comments: 6
gelal [2006-08-26 07:10:14 +0000 UTC]
Unfortunately I can't speek Greek or this would appear much cooler than it is.
Sublime usage. The hair at the nape of my neck stood to attention.
I am never sorry for watching you.
Sieges end and wars begin but for the fortunate few sweat and pleasure are the battlegrounds.
Long days, pleasant nights
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Rikochet [2006-06-26 19:29:31 +0000 UTC]
Well, given the wonderful praise you've received so far, I'll dig a tad deeper.
Words, words, words. The most difficult or lyrical isn't always the appropriate one. "Exigency", "perambulate", "crush the husk of your brain". It's like a sweet completely drenched in honey. Είναι γλυκό, είναι υπέροχο, αλλά μετά από λίγο σε λιγώνει. Όλα αυτά βοηθούν στην hazy, ονειρική ατμόσφαιρα του κειμένου αλλά παίζουν φάπες με τον αναγνώστη. Η 'ερωτική' σκηνή είναι all too much ερωτική. Δεν συνίσταται για ζεστές μέρες δίχως κρύο νερό κοντά. Επίσης, να αποφεύγεις να ξεκινάς με "and" μετά από τελεία. Και να ντύνεσαι καλά γιατί κάνει κρύο (;!).
Ο Ψείρας της γειτονιάς σας (tm)
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Sombermuse [2006-06-24 06:41:34 +0000 UTC]
and you are fond of my writing.... pffft... amazing quality work, this is all beautifully well written and i must fav....
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lordceleborn [2006-06-22 18:41:40 +0000 UTC]
For being off season .. I am really shakened.
You have managed to capture with the little possible word count a large ammount of the essence of summer
and still if wasnt your main subject.
You are working an excellent duality and a very good sence of written imagery.
I havent read anything written by you before, thus my comments might be 'general'
but I am waiting for your next update.
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