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echo2themoon — Sepicglore: Introductory
Published: 2012-08-10 10:58:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 169; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 0
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 Introductory 


In a world far away, in a realm unknown. Where Magic, and fairy tales comes to life. And mystical creatures, and dragons rule the lands. comes a great kingdom, known as, Sepicglore. In it. There is the Balliscort Family. A king named, Brathien von balliscort the 3rd, along with his two children, Elizabeth Alexandria Balliscort, and, Alexander bathen Balliscort. They are a strange family of sorts. They aren't the nicest rulers either. The king, Brathien, is a very stern, and stubborn king. Known to have a very bad temper, but is very protective of his kingdom. Even though he might not always make the right decisions for his people. He is also incredibly powerful, with his intensive knowledge of magic, he is said he can make the mightiest of dragons bow to his feet. It's even said that he is responsible for sealing the dark realms by just the touch of his fingers. And then they are his two children. His two, mischievous, sly, cunning, manipulative, children. This story is about their adventures, and the trouble the both get in, competing against one another for the thrown, and ruler of the realms. 



Alexander Balliscort, Called, lord Alex. Is one of the brightest people of the lands. Has studied with some of the greatest  Wizards, and scholars in the kingdom. Is very talented in both, magic, and combat weapons. It is even said that he can hold his on going head to head with general, maverick. But would rather spends his days in his lab, learning new spells, and learning the secrets to the many different realms of the land. He is also very cunning, and sly, and that much like his sister, wishes to concur the realms, but unlike her, has motives, as he wants to discover all that he can from the realms, and knows that if his sister took over, she would probably destroy precious data, and he would do anything  in his power to stop her - FOR THE SAKE OF KNOWLEDGE! he's only setback is that, he's afraid of EVERYTHING. Yes, yes, he's even said to be afraid of he's own shadow. So He has he's servant, Bassily do all he's fighting for him. And makes her even go collect data for him, on days he's can't gather the courage to go out of the kingdom, or even the castle. Yes. This guy has problems. Srrsly. 

 

Elizabeth Balliscort, known as, Lord Lizzy,( because she doesn't want to be called princess ) Is the worst out of the two. Although, most say she's the most gifted in terms of ability. She is also the most problematic for the kingdom, and the realms alike. For the simple reason, she's crazy as a loon. Lord Lizzy, Who want's to conquer the world, just because she wants to . And will get rid of anyone who stands in her way, did we mention she's heartless too? She's also not the brightest broom around either, that's probably a good thing considering how powerful she is...or maybe not. she is has a great knowledge of spells. she's so powerful that some of the wizards can't even teach her, because her magic rivals theirs, and she knows it. from a very young age she has always been very powerful. Rumor has it, that when she was 5, she open the dark realms, and unleashed terror upon the kingdom for 9 days, and 9 nights. It is said that event is the cause of her seamlessly endless pool of magic, and that having direct access to so much magic at such a young age is the reason she's mad. And that her father put a seal on her to keep her from accessing so much of her magic at a time so that an event like the dark realms could never happen again in the kingdom. It is also said she has a mind like a child, for she has a lot of childish ways. Her servant, Aden, is forced to go on her many crazy journeys with her. 


Aden lenthale paullert, lord Lizzy's servant, and Is a very meek soul. Like Lord Alex, wishes to spend his days just reading, and learning about the many different realms in Sepicglore. But is unable to do that because he is constantly  chasing after Lord Lizzy, and cleaning up her messes. When he was younger, he actually use to be lord Alex's servant. And his sister, Bassily, was lord Lizzy's servant. But like lord Alex, Aden is also very much afraid of everything. While his sister is the opposite of him, just like how lord Lizzy is the opposite to lord Alex. For the king, this was very troublesome. For he could not get Alex to leave the castle, and could not get Lizzy to stay in. Aden's sister, Bassilly, was just as bad as Lizzy, (aside from being evil or course ) they would go everywhere together causing much trouble for the kingdom, and instead of Bassily keeping an eye out for lord Lizzy, and talking her out of crazy things, she would practicly encourage it. The two cause the land great havoc. So the king decided that it be best to switch the two, In hoping the personalities would counteract one another, and keep his children, mostly Lizzy, out of trouble. Aden, doesn't really excel in anything much really. He's pretty much less average at most things, accept bookworm knowledge.  He knows pretty much basic spells, and the ones he does knows he usually falls at. He dreams to one day leave his job as being a servant to lord Lizzy, and live a peaceful quiet life. 


Bassilly merran paullert, not much to say with her except that she's lords alex's servant. She's sort of spacey, and doesn't appear to think about serious things. She keeps a long, heavy sword wrapped up in her hair. And appears to to be very skilled in combat. It's said she can actually beat lord Alex with is ease, but her sole purpose is to protect him. Takes everything on a very lighthearted note. And never seems to be sad, or angry. Unless lord Alex is danger. Usually forces Alex out of his lab to go out in to the kingdom. And seems to be the causes to his many anxieties. Has no magical power what so ever, but also seems to be immune to magic as well. Which is one reason she doesn't fear lord Lizzy, and is able to fight her head on if needed during the many siblings fights against one another.  




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Comments: 2

achipps [2012-08-10 17:41:50 +0000 UTC]

Normally I would read the whole thing, but I am starting Advanced College reading this fall, and I have a lot to read.

The way it started it seems like a good story if you use what you have to image more. Making into a huge chapter and editing out everything that is chatting about not relative things, and a more active path for the reader.

Most of the statistic, personalities, economical basics, and physical properties, is more of the information the writer needs, not the reader.
All the reader needs is to be guided through this world you created with a story and action.
Most introductions is a section at the beginning to explain everything, but a story can start in the middle of action.

What kind of live would people have if the stop to fill everyone in.

Most just start like when you meet someone they could be too busy to explain what they are doing, but if you watch you will start to see what is happening.

Sorry I didn't read more, but I think the first part of the story is important to capture the audience. Use curiosity to let them figure out what is happening, and keep the story active.

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echo2themoon In reply to achipps [2012-08-20 16:20:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much! I really didn't like this after I posted it. I plan to take it down and try again.

Thanks for the advice, and its ok that you didn't read it all. It isn't that good,I'll have to try again at writing the story.

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