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Eishiban — moka part 3
Published: 2012-10-07 17:37:56 +0000 UTC; Views: 77963; Favourites: 1505; Downloads: 1097
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Shut up, REALdocter, this is anime. It does not concern you
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Is real doctors not the same as anime doctors? I'll just ask my colleagues
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So disappointed with how rushed and unfulfilling the ending of Buyuden was. :<
At least this sequence won't be tarnished by it <:y
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"Ahhh... What happened to me? Where does this come from...?"
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Could you put some links to the previous parts? owo
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She's really cute! O_O
That expression is so beautiful
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What is the manga she's from? After reading the little convo up there, I'd love to go check it out.
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Thanks. Looking at it now.
Clicked on a random chapter and came up with the one where she starts gaining weight, lol.
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Well it's amazing she was even allowed to be made fat at all considering usual standards of the appearance of women in general
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Especially in Japan too where they have anti-fat laws...
Still, gonna drop this manga if they make her skinny. You maybe gonna write about it based on these pics? Spread the word?
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Anti-fat laws?
I've never had interest in that manga itself, the only thing that caught my attention was because of that girl, but I don't think I'd read it.
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Yeah, look it up.
Well me and okamialpha are thinking on one :/
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That's a terrible thing; fat asian girls are cute too.
Yeah I'm good friends with that guy too. Well, it's like a boxing manga that she's in, right?
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It's because they don't want to be like 'Murrica.
Yes she is. She's gonna be in an MMA/Sumo esque style of competition.
And also, you got called out on bbwchan btw
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"She's gonna be in an MMA/Sumo esque style of competition"
Do you have proof of that, or is that just a hope?
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Course not.
Me and another dude are gonna write that though
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Right, figured that out right after I posted that, lol. That happening in canon would be too good to be true.
Still, looking forward to reading that - I always found it tragic Moka basically had her dreams ripped out from under her, so I'd like to see her get another shot, if only in fanfiction.
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Oh, wait, you mean in your story. N/M.
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But that sounds like something coming from a country ruled by a dictator
Really? That sounds kinda interesting; at least it's being integrated into the story.
Called out? What, people pissed at me again even though I didn't do anything?
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My writing style is really that bad?
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Well...if I have to critique, you usually go right into the fattening instead fo the stuffing, which leads to the fattening. Unless there's a magical spell or some scientific experiment it can be rather...bland after a while.
In addition, you sort of lean towards yuri a lot(which I think they don't like) and it gets rather predictable.
I'm just being straight with ya
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Is that what they said too?
I know the yuri isn't everybody's favorite; I don't always mean to use it. Maybe I should just delete this stuff and start over.
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Try going for OC pairings, or maybe canon pairings. You don't need to delete your stuff. You can remake stuff though
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Well, I wasn't going to have Sam and Rita get together or anything in 'Roly-Poly Rita' either, anyway. Yeah I suppose I can do those. I don't have an aversion to het; it just doesn't occur as often. And I did have an idea of an old OC pairing I was going to use eventually a husband and wife.
Well, thanks for letting me know. It's way better critique compared to what trolls give me, which is basically 'stop writing'.
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I've been meaning to try and make changes like that, but it just sorta ends up falling on the wayside
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Actually never mind; I'd rather not know what else they might've said.
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