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Published: 2010-03-09 15:41:41 +0000 UTC; Views: 1491; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 61
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Comments? Been working on it for some time but still thinks something missing....feedback are most welcome!
And thanks to following stock artists;
Model; [link]
Background sky and clouds: [link]
Airplane and background: [link]
Group of airplanes: [link]
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maybe some war action is missing, like an explosion on the horizon, behind the trees or an airplane cannon fire.although I think it's perfect the way it is!
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Glad you do, and thanks a lot! I have almost forgot about this one, and every time I see it it reminds of the things that need to be reworked.. but if you think its perfect Im not gonna argue with you
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First of all: good work!
To me adding a foggy should be functional in photo manipulation, because after visiting a lot of art in DA I find this is how artists escape from things they don't want to try doing it.
I disagree with how the air plane behind her is as blurry, I know it is possible, but look at the planes on the sky at top, they are less blurred according to air perspective.
her feet should get better define.. and her shadow on floor should not be just some black air brushing.
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Your right. As always
A personal issue for me, though, is even though I know things need to be fixed, I have so much trouble actually picking up the piece again. Can remember this from school and in art class. When I had finished a piece I never wanted to touch it again. Which is a flaw, but not that uncommon? Any advice on that?
However, I tried with this one, but apparently I did some mistake early in the process not creating "non-destructive" workflow. So a big part of the image needs to be done all over again.
Long answer 
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ah yes it is a known issue .. my friend.
my ideas:
you need to make it fun for u to go there again, and redo everything, to me i am ok about restarting the art from scratch. simply because i know very well i wouldn't take same time in making it again.
it is ok to break it and start from scratch many times too, until you reach the perfect quality.
to me i ask my self: what are the steps you have to do to remake it?
and i write a note pad list, which has even the silliest tasks like:
1. open photoshop.
2. make new file with the same size of the old image.
3. take the layers you wouldn't remake from the old file to the new one.
4.estimate the time needed to redone the rest.
then i list the things i need to make:
5.use path tool to cut the girl.
6.save the cut girl in a layer call it back up, and start to cut the plane.
7.bring the background image.
8.flatten the plane , girl, and background and start to change the colors by curves and color correction.
9. make a new black and white image of the original, and try to change the contrast to evoke the tunes.
10.submit the final image, get ready to hear the critic, and remake again.
by having a note card which has all steps you need to do, you can stop working any time and come back next day to continue .. because u know where you stopped at.
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It's awesome, you chose the composites very nicely. I love the idea and most of the realization
As you said you're not yet content, I'll try my best to help you a little:
As you already said, the blur of the composites seems to be a bit off sometimes. For example the rear of the plane has the same amount of blur as the front, which is actually a bit further away. The girl however isn't blurred at all, she's perfectly sharp (and hot). This is little illogical, because the distance between the plane and the girl isn't that large.
Also the fact that the girl is the only sharp part of the image makes her stand out in a way that makes it obvious that she doesn't really belong there.
Next about the composition; there are 3 points of interest in the image, the plane, the girl and the planes in the sky. Only the top left lacks details which makes the whole work a bit imbalanced.
Resizing the girl and maybe moving her a little towards the center could make the whole image more harmonic.
I'd also recommend hiding the planes in the sky a little, e.g. behind some slight fog/clouds. I think they stand out too much.
/well, now I wrote more than I wanted to, hope it helps you. ^.^
And if it was trash I wrote, just ignore it~
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Excellent and very helpful. I shall repost when Ive tried implement your changes. Again, thanks for input!
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The work is absolutely awesome. I don't think that anything is missing although, if you feel that it lacks something maybe because is caused by composition: there is an empty space in the upper-left part of the image, most part of the composition is on the right side.
It's only my opinion
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Yeah, youre right. Maybe Ill try either adding a component there or moving the planes a bit. Its been a few days so its only natural that they traveled a bit further...
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Flipping canvas horizontaly is also a great way to see a new point of view. is what I always do
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I really like this. I honestly can't see anything that would be missing. It all looks very smooth and well done to me. Great job!
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Thank you! I was struggling with the amount of blur on the different objects (considering dof)...and perspective as well. Hmm, maybe enlarge her and make it look even more as a "ground-level shot" (dont know the english term
On the other hand, I might be overdoing it. And, glad for your comment and fav!
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