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Published: 2011-11-29 01:02:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 1016; Favourites: 33; Downloads: 16
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Oh my god I can finally upload it! It's been ready for a few weeks but I was waiting because this is a gift for a friend. This is my 30x40 inches painting made in oils and acrylics. It's a reproduction from a drawing I've made [link] and it was basically a big test for me to see if I was able to achieve a big painting like that and stick to it until it's done.And I succeeded! Of course, I need a lot more practice with brushes and I need to find my own style, but that's why I ask you to critique. I'm very open to anything you could suggest as far as technique goes.
Also, the colours are more darker on this picture, I wish I could make a good picture out of it, maybe I'll upload something soon.
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I think this is really amazing! The only things that I would have wished to have seen done a little different would have been for the dark colors, like the tree and person, to be even darker. And I have to say that the one foot is a little oddly shaped. Other than that I absolutely love this. I think the shading is really incredible! I also have to say that the way the body is bent and positioned is really impressive. I think it would be difficult to get the proportions and everything right with that way it is done. I honestly just really love this.
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Ooh, thank you for taking the time to critique. Yes, the darkness of the body's skin has been repeatedly brought to me, it is true that it kind of lacks some contrast there. I wish the picture could do its justice though, the background looks so much darker than it really is! Otherwise, I think the proportions are a little bit weird myself, like the stomach part that might be too long; i tried to imagine her standing and it looked so awkward... But I'm glad you think it looks alright! Again, thanks a lot for your time. I appreciate it a lot.
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La peinture c'est vraiment pas mon truc alors je ne vais pas m'aventurer sur la technique.
Toutefois, je trouve le corps inégal (Ouais, je sais, c'est super clair comme adjectif).
Les jambes semblent très lourdes et n'ont pas la «fragilité» des bras et du torse.
Aussi, la rondeur des fesses manque de naturel et brise le côté torturé de l'oeuvre.
Y'as un truc que j'aime vraiment par contre...
Sur le dessin, le corps semble en suspension alors que sur la toile, il semble en chute libre.
J'imagine que c'est dû aux couleurs.
Parlant des couleurs, j'adore les ombres rouges.
C'est déconstruit/mal écrit/mal expliqué/mal exprimé, j'suis désolée.
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C'est bon tu t'es pas mal exprimée du tout!
C'est vrai par contre que ça détonne vraiment, la fragilité de son buste pour les grosses jambes qu'elle a. Comme j'ai répondu à Zephorax, mes personnages ont toujours été proportionnés comme ça, après je suis d'accord que ça fait rond longtemps pis peut-être un peu trop solide pour l'atmosphère de la toile au complet... Comment tu l'as dit, le côté ''torturé'', c'est bien dit.
Bref, merci pour avoir pris le temps, j'apprécie ben gros.
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i am so much in love with it. not really anything else to say
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I think it would be good for me to try to critique something to build analysis skills. I hope you don't mind, I know I'm not the greatest but I'll try my best.
(I think you missed out the 'b' in observe)
The only thing i can see that pokes out shape-wise is the bottom, which is very round. I understand that with a pose like that the bottom will squish up more than standing straight, although in my opinion it looks too circular. I would also consider adding more reflective light along the edges of the body on the darker parts as things might blend into each other (such as the two calfs where you have added a line of red paint which doesn't look like it belongs). Also, with the dimensions of the layers, i would consider somehow defining the figure with a line art (maybe around 80% opacity so it doesn't look too comic like). If you don't want a line art you could add another level of shadows to define lines more (such as in the ankles).. I can see some darker shadows between the clavicle if that gives you an idea of what I'm trying to say. Also, to make the figure stick out you could add a bit more yellow around it to give it an aura, but that can also change the mood which you have to consider. Lastly, the background colour seems to go over the branches, which gives a feeling of mist (in my opinion, maybe you were trying to give it a feeling of.. i forgot the word, but its when you focus in on something and the background is blurry). I think that adding blacks to some branches that are either pointing away or towards you (one or the other, depending on the light source) so that some are darker but more clear and others are being consumed by the mist.
This is my first try at critiquing so, sorry again if it is not useful.
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Shit! I really thought I replied to this.
Your critique is perfect. I've made many for you and there's only thing I kept in mind; give advices instead of only criticizing... This is what you did. As for what you pointed out, I agree. The fat bottom is something quite reluctant in my characters though, I guess I just don't know yet how to make real-looking curves yet.
The colors are what most people notice that doesn't work in the painting. It's true though, I wish I had a better sense at colors (this should come over time though, because mixing colors in painting is so much different than ink). At first I wanted her to be completely black, with maybe grey/purple-ish highlights and maybe something like a white lining, but it would've been really difficult to paint without losing track of the lining job I made with the projector. I also thought about the lining afterwards... I still don't know, but at the same time for my future paintings I plan on doing it with black ink. Diluting it sounds like a good idea though, I will definitely do that.
The background fade of the branches is something I liked though, I don't thing I would've changed that. Maybe I could have taken time to make it more realistic as you said with the depth of field effect, but I like the illogical way it goes. kind of makes it more freewilled or something?, like it's not calculated so much.
Again, thank you so much for helping me out. I think you have a great way to share your words, they're all really helpful to me and I appreciate every time you take time to put your thoughts on what I do. <3
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I think you may find this video interesting (in reference to what you said about losing the line art).
It is only teaser/trailer of the artists whole dvd though. Hope it helps.
[link]
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