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eman66 — Who I Am...
Published: 2007-05-17 03:35:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 27; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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It's a part of me,A flaw behind perfection,
Those little things you can't see,
It's who I am.
There's some connection
From now to my past,
Something new in the reflection,
Something that wasn't there.
Maybe this confusion won't last,
But that little moment,
It passed so fast,
Am I sure it really was there?
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Whoah...
Not only did you squeeze an excellent rhyme scheme in there, but the poem itself has really deep meaning to it... that's a problem that I have when I write - if I try too hard to make it rhyme, sometimes I don't get across what I really want to say. You don't seem to have a problem with that though!
I think you earned a 
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Thanks, i actually lay out a set pattern after i get a stanza, cause when i think stuff up i usually think of one really good stanza or a pair of lines and work the rest out after a while. That one was three days of working through writters block.
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Maybe I should try not to rush through writing a poem all at once like I usually do then...
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THat's what i do, i keep working with it until i really like how it sounds. I'm actually working on a set of lyrics for a concept album, kinda post apocalypse except minus the removal of humanity.
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Lyrics are really fun! I'm working on my first song right now. It's kinda half-finished... I think I'm going to completely redo the second half
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Just work till you like it, till you feel like you're proud to sing it. Then you know your done.
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