Comments: 11
Khrests [2012-02-04 09:35:27 +0000 UTC]
I really like the description you added. But I do have one thing.
Only the 'Originals' can control the weather. While a normal Dosoi could control the snow already falling from a storm/blizzard, they can not summon one. As to create that storm he would have to manipulate air conditions and condensation levels, not only the ice/snow that he chose to control. So you will have to edit that. C:
Otherwise I do really like it. It's well thought out.
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empiredog In reply to Khrests [2012-02-05 18:04:59 +0000 UTC]
ok, i edited it...kinda weird though, but i hope it's better. :}
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Khrests In reply to empiredog [2012-02-05 19:16:52 +0000 UTC]
Well it's kind of okay. You shouldn't say 'controlled the storm' it should be more 'controlled the ice around him'
And you didn't remove the snowstorm and blizzard in his power listing. xD
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empiredog In reply to Khrests [2012-02-05 19:32:26 +0000 UTC]
ok, should be fixed now. I also changed the power to ice/snow.
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Khrests In reply to empiredog [2012-02-05 20:22:01 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. C: very good.
Sorry for not making everything very clear. <3
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HolyFrap [2012-02-03 23:05:48 +0000 UTC]
She's so cute!
A tip though (since you mentioned you never win in the adoption rounds) The judges judge (lol) not only the picture, but how original the story is. You'll notice the people who win always have a huge backstory and a well thought out reff picture, with a full reff sheet or background.
With what you have now, it looks like you haven't put any real effort into it; and I know =Khrests won't want to give away one of her babies to someone who isn't willing to put the effort into breathing their dosoi to life.
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empiredog In reply to HolyFrap [2012-02-04 00:24:48 +0000 UTC]
the last one i tried for, took me almost 3 hours for the drawing, then over an hour writing the backstory. I plan to make a large one for this one, i'm just still thinking it up (takes me awhile)
Are you saying i didn't put effort in the descrip? or the art? (the descrip is still a wip, and the art took me several hours)
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HolyFrap In reply to empiredog [2012-02-05 02:51:26 +0000 UTC]
Don't go getting offended.
It was a tip, one you can take or leave.
While I'm sure you put effort into the drawing, the contest is not based on art alone. You are missing 50% of the adoption piece, and when comparing to the other entries, your piece lacks information as well as the hard effort the others 'seemed' to have put in it. (Consider the backgrounds and smaller details.)
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empiredog In reply to HolyFrap [2012-02-05 06:53:53 +0000 UTC]
i wasn't getting offended, i was just trying to clarify what you were saying.Anyways, you shouldn't judge art by how it "seems"....And im not good at doing backgrounds in that short of time. it takes me weeks, much longer than the contest timeline...
Thankyou for your tips though. I might be able to make a better piece of art, and im still working on the Background info.
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HolyFrap In reply to empiredog [2012-02-06 20:14:45 +0000 UTC]
The art is really nice, just it seems empty without a background you know?
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Chocostars [2012-01-26 03:28:05 +0000 UTC]
love the textures here
good luck on the contest
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