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Published: 2010-10-08 08:26:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 719; Favourites: 15; Downloads: 18
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Here's page two of Schaffer's Inc. new short story: "Hunting in the city". It's a seven page story, check the first one here: [link] and number 2 here: [link] Comments are welcome, enjoy folks.Related content
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I really like the style you've developed, AndrΓ©. Everything looks great. You're really good at defining the space your characters are in, and putting enough details in the environments that, when seen from other angles, the reader knows exactly what part of the room they're looking at. I love the last panel, with the back of Mr. Steinbeck's monitor in the foreground and Schaffer in the background. It's a clever way to show both characters and what they're doing in a really dynamic way. Awesome job. All of your details in the environment are really good. You can definitely tell that they're in a space ship and not just hanging out in a normal house. Good job man. This is great.
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It's a main concern for me now, to always give a good sense of placement. I believe it's much easier to follow the story if we always show what the action is and where is taking place.
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Definitely. Otherwise you just have your characters appearing in front of colored backgrounds or something. There's no sense of environment, which can really affect the story in a negative way. You're absolutely right about the importance of a good sense of placement.
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Bon Alimagno taught me that. Awesome person.
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Hmm, I'd never heard of him before but I did a quick search online. It looks like he did some Vampirella stuff. Do you have any links of stuff he's done that you really enjoy? I'd love to learn more about him.
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He is an editor at Marvel, right now managing new talents. I think book-wise (as far as I know) Vampirella is the thing he left his mark on so far, before joining Marvel.
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Ah, gotcha. Seems like a smart guy.
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nice
fingers of monkey boy are a little weak in the last panel...
but you've got an overall excellent sense of anatomy;
and great budding style to boot.
You're one to watch.
First panel is weakest though.
Maybe cuz it's too centered..?
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That's what I imagined my version of the Justice League's "Watchtower" would look like...but I suck at sci-fi stuff and it looks no where near as good lol
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Thanks. Well, my stuff only looks a bit good after lots of practice, so don't ever give up.
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Such detailed work 
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Thanks! It's up to those two, and they don't appreciate cleaning that much...
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