kabloona [2005-10-17 07:42:13 +0000 UTC]

In going through your stuff again, I feel disappointed at how few comments your poems received.

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moonlight-sonata [2003-11-24 06:29:59 +0000 UTC]

there seems to be some intense feeling behind this

generous dose of hyperbole and the rarity of using 'Oh!' -- you used it twice, as I have done when words cannot say enough, but a noise will suffice

its interesting though. the contrast isn't overbearing but still quite stark - How dare you command my mind's silence?. whoever it is they have quite a power over you.

it was a good read

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kabloona [2003-11-23 14:08:22 +0000 UTC]

Now, after going back and re-reading your description after having read the poem and commented on it, I want to answer the question in your description.

The border between those two pairs of opposited you mention is not clear and fixed. It is fuzzy and constantly changing position. Sometimes there is not border: it just disappears. You thought you were on one side and suddenly you find you are on the other.

In the short term, you may find the border, but in the long term, you must resolve the polarities.

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kabloona [2003-11-23 14:03:19 +0000 UTC]

What do I get out of this?

You describe a conflict. You have an urge and a desire to speak what comes into your heart and mind. You object to being silenced. On the other hand, you would welcome silence if it were accompanied by an inner peace.

The poem has personification/projection which is typical of you/your voice.

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