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EvyMyu — The Ancient War Chapter 9 -Enigma-
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Published: 2018-09-08 17:18:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 11443; Favourites: 315; Downloads: 62
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I'm not good at English,if I made mistakes please tell me,thank you!
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of course the culprit was died
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Comments: 46
i adore the way you add your own original monster designs into this comic (could you even call it a comic?)!
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That lady bird it remind me of devilman characters.
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Awwww now I'm being attached to those characters!
And I know they will die during war... i'm already sad knowing their fate T.T
Also:
you miss the "i" of "with" in: "He wanted to see if he could live with humans." in the fourth pannel.
Great story and your art is... Breath taking!
SO GORGEOUS!!!
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Seeing your ancient war stuff 100% makes testing day much more bearable!
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haha THE HUMAN CHAMPIONS, THE PROTAGONISTS OF ALL THOSE OTHER VIDEO GAMES
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Beautiful~ btw it's 'he would never kill anybody/anyone'
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I'd love to watch this story and characters as an animated film !
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Hey dude, if you ever need someone to look over your speech bubbles, hit me up. I'd love to help you out in that way!
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Is ok~my English is bad too!!! And now I still made a lot mistake ~But I do try to made my English better~
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I'm curious to see where the story is going 
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Just saying this because you asked us to tell if there were errors.
I think you should get someone that corrects your text, because even tho I understand it, it's not really correct and it throws me off a bit. It's such a shame, considering the art is so amazing.
I am not listing the errors because the whole page's dialogue could be rewrited in a more natural way. I suppose you're not a professional and you might not care that much since it's understandable anyway, (and most people who read this don't care either), so you don't have to do anything if you don't want to. I'm just saying.
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I tried to change some words how about now!
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Nnnno. Sorry I don't see an improvement.
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As I told you, it's ok, you don't need to change anything if you don't want to. It's still understandable.
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thank you,I feel embarrassed if there's a lot of mistakes...
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that's okay, your first language isn't english so it's not something you should be ashamed of
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Unfortunately I don't have that excuse.
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I always want to read this but I’m never able to read the words because they’re always blurry but I’m capable of seeing the pictures and your artwork is amazing
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Really like the shot with the silhouettes of the humans and monsters joining to some kind of agreement. When I noticed the background I liked it even more!
didn^t really understand the description though
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I'm not good at English,if I made mistakes you can tell me!
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I just don't really understand what it means (the description), so I woldn't really know what mistake you made or if there actually is one... cause I have problems with english too at times
but for example accomodation (i think) means place where you can live, not agreement (i guess that's what you meant to say) and contradictions means things that don't make sense.
and i'd be able to go on and on, cause being critic and rambling seems to be in my family :/
sorry about the rambling
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Wow! Thank you for not getting irritated because of the rambling! Is it okay if in the future I'll tell you about the mistakes i think there are? if not i'll stap annoying you
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peek a boo XD
also i completely agree this is breathtaking
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AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
*RUNS*
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I have an interesting question:
How can you draw arts, not even knowing that it was SPOILER to comics ... ?!
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