Comments: 36
yellowis4happy [2011-11-24 20:39:33 +0000 UTC]
Oooh, the suspense!
Sorry I've been so lax in commenting on these, I've been really busy lately and haven't had a lot of time to be reading. ): But I'm on break now, so I had time to go through what you've posted so far, and I really like what you've done. This page is especially nice. I like all the heavy blacks. :]
Your translations for this chapter so far have been almost perfect - on page 83, it should read "His eyes also bleed!!" instead of "Their eyes also bleed," because she is talking about Sesshoumaru and not more than one person, and "I have lost this much blood?!" would be better than "So much blood I lost?!"
On page 84, "Because I cannot bleed" would fit Kikyou's personality more than "Because I can't bleed," since she tends to speak more formally, and "can't" feels more casual. "Rare" should be "strange" or "odd," and "Like if someone had died here. Short time ago" would be better as "As if someone died here... a short time ago."
On this page, it should be "there must be a way to save them!" instead of just "must be a way to save them!" Otherwise your translation is spot on.
I can't wait to see what happens next!
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YakuKikyo [2011-11-21 21:02:25 +0000 UTC]
Ow.... I so can't wait to see what's gonna happen next !
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WolfLegend [2011-11-20 20:23:47 +0000 UTC]
._. poor old men ...i think sesshomaru its gonna kill the demons enyway D:
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Soul1991 [2011-11-16 11:48:13 +0000 UTC]
Amazin ^.^
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Narakulover24 [2011-11-15 11:28:17 +0000 UTC]
Please update....
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FanasY In reply to Narakulover24 [2011-11-15 16:42:43 +0000 UTC]
In a week there'll be more pages n_n
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Narakulover24 [2011-11-15 06:16:25 +0000 UTC]
Interesting...
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Lorenya-chan [2011-11-15 03:42:33 +0000 UTC]
siguiente semana? no me dejes asii D: sesshomaru tiene cara de mm matare no matare... y kiero saber que araaaaaa D:
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FanasY In reply to Cati-Art [2011-11-15 16:40:34 +0000 UTC]
I hope you like the next pages dear Cati!!
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Theultimateclub [2011-11-14 16:42:41 +0000 UTC]
Write great job 2 in one day
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FanasY In reply to nekolover94 [2011-11-15 16:35:21 +0000 UTC]
XDDthanks for reading ^^
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