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FancyJuiceBox — The End of Something Good

Published: 2007-12-03 21:10:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 75; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Description When I first saw you my body went cold,
I realized then I’d give all for those hands to be mine to hold.
When we sat on the couch a few inches apart,
I realized then I’d end up trusting you with my heart.
It was that first glimpse that stole my breath,
I envisioned you being my strength if my father had an earlier death.
I expected such good things from you,
I saw you as someone so strong, so unique and true.
You promised me the day I met you that your feelings were pure,
To any insecurities, problems, you were the cure.
I backed off at first but began to believe you,
Probably why I held you so tight; I didn’t want to leave you.
Your eyes made my knees week, your smile did too,
I was starting to realize my love for you.
I’d see us in windows, as we’d take a walk,
I intended on saying how cute we were, but I didn’t talk.
We could speak without saying a word,
I’d look into your eyes and my message of love was surely heard.
I do miss your hands as they fondled my hair,
As I’d lie in your arms, close my eyes, and be without care.
However I was unaware and I’d say a prayer,
The one time I’d need you, you would not be there.
The day did come and my father did die,
You heard me cry, I watched you try, but in the end the tension was high.
You insistently said you’d have my back,
But we know now that your promise meant jack.
So I sit here and cry, as I figure out why,
I loved you so much but you didn’t even try.
Communication was cut short again and again,
As I’d sit there crying, needing more than a friend.
Your life got busier and weeks would pass, me sitting here,
Even though I tried to hide it, the choice was clear.
I’d have given you chances but this was the last,
And you said we’re over; let’s put this in the past.
I thought I loved you and you loved me,
But I guess we really weren’t meant to be.
I regret nothing I said but I suffer for you,
Convincing a girl of feelings untrue.
And that is the end of you.
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Comments: 3

LegaxEsom [2007-12-03 23:23:54 +0000 UTC]

Very well written. The AABB rhyme scheme was kept up incredibly well despite the trappings rhymes like those tend to create. Excellent piece.

This rings too true for me. Or at least it's about to...

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FancyJuiceBox In reply to LegaxEsom [2007-12-03 23:53:57 +0000 UTC]

I thank you for your nice words!
Heart break hurts, especially when you truly think it was your first. Gift from God perhaps. Guess it didn't turn out that way.
& I'm sorry for your pain.

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LegaxEsom In reply to FancyJuiceBox [2007-12-04 12:40:19 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

And it's...not my heartbreak. It's hers. But thank you, nonetheless

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