WhiteHart [2004-12-12 06:31:52 +0000 UTC]
I like it all but lines 42-55, great job Brendan, a well constructed poem.
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zphoenixdownz [2004-12-02 23:44:31 +0000 UTC]
i really like the first half, before "Let's escape."
it's like a modern gulliver writing a diary.
but after that you just lose all of the imagery you had before, and it all turns to mush.
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