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Published: 2004-09-18 19:47:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 234; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 9
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Description Would my words grow as roots –
break through the damp sod
and in their tangling, spread on everoutwards.
From the soil draw the damp, the life, the growing,

in growing grow more.  Let them tangle, let them overcome
the straightness of the horizon.
If these words could only split
the lines of letters, mar the numbness of creation

and thrive utterly vegetable.  Slower than the lines of lightning,
slower than the human hand, – far slower
than the weight of the rock
pressing down on our backs.

My fingers of roots break through your loam.
It’s all darkness down there.  No fingertips touching.  No eyes.  If only
these words might infest that lightless earth.

Let them bloom in secret then – hidden, deep.
Let them live their ghostly lives inside your ghost.
Alone, unknown – free with force of unwritten pages, free like fallow fields.
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Comments: 4

muddpuddle [2004-10-10 15:35:03 +0000 UTC]

Interesting rhythm. It, doesn't seem to quite match up though, the begining and the end. Something not quite right, but i cant think of it. Excellent tho...

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undefinability [2004-09-20 08:01:46 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha, dig the description.

And I'm not sure whether it's the amount of poetic shit I've read lately, or that I haven't read your work for sometime, but I really have nothing to say about this.
I do, but I'm too focused on something else to even attempt to critique. Nevertheless, I am compelled to do something, and it might be something you hate, but it has to be done.

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sarahtomic [2004-09-19 23:14:17 +0000 UTC]

I think I'd like it more if I were better read and read better. *Sigh* the troubles of the non-English major. I wish I were more pretentious, I really do.

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festivemanb In reply to sarahtomic [2004-09-20 04:29:21 +0000 UTC]

Dude, you have so much opportuntiy to be pretentious. Just not the particular refined English major pretentiousness that I can deal with. You can be an art pretentiousness, a music pretentiousness,,,, many many things. Me? I'm stuck with words.

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