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Burningblaster [2018-09-15 15:37:25 +0000 UTC]
What a beautiful story! I so wanna be Mark in this scenario!
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log111111 [2017-07-07 09:11:29 +0000 UTC]
I can't help but feel that Mark was just a good time kind of guy and it was all in her head. When you're out to dinner with a big group of good pals, you get an appetizer, and if you're a drinking group, you drink, that's how 20 something's hang out. He was probably staring at her at the wedding because he'd never seen her actually drink before, and the bigger slice of cake was probably because she was drunk and bread based food helps you sober up. Her friends gained weight because when you aren't a teen anymore, partying will do that to you unless you get strict about excercise. And she finally started to put on weight when she finally dropped her guard and let being married, affluent, and pregnant does to a body. I imagine his inner monologue while she's thinking about his evil scheme to fatten her up later went a bit like "I can never tell if Kate's having fun or not. Whenever we go out with friends she's always the only one not drinking or snacking, and she's always looking at her friends, then at me, then at the drinks, then back to me, and squinting like she thinks I'm up to something. I really care about her, she's the first girl who hasn't gone nuts with partying and decided to let go of everything like I can do everything myself. I just wish I could understand why she's so suspicious of me. Maybe when I finally pop the question she'll finally let me in."
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flaminghades14 In reply to log111111 [2017-08-21 03:08:06 +0000 UTC]
I'm pleased that you found the story so interesting and greatly appreciate your perspective on this. Truthfully, I never had decided if Mark's nature was deliberately malicious, or as you described it, merely Kate's perception of things. Personally, I much prefer your lens to the story but one will never know which is correct.
Either way, thanks for the response and for enjoying the story!
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Forcedlactationlover [2017-06-04 19:35:27 +0000 UTC]
Kate may have been 'doomed', as she put it, but the excellent marriage and family are more than just compensations, they're a good life.
Well written with a strong character as lead/narrator. As for Mark, he is what he is, and we can accept that as well as she does, a basically very good man with one 'kink', as it were.
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flaminghades14 In reply to Forcedlactationlover [2017-08-21 03:06:02 +0000 UTC]
I am glad you feel that there is a positive spin to the story. My main focus was to keep it geared towards the honest realities of dating / a long term relationship and the toll of aging. Thanks for reading!
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ChubbaDubDub [2016-08-11 10:24:00 +0000 UTC]
This was a really great read! I really didn't know where it was going (in a good way), but I was definitely happy with how it turned out. Creative, sexy and well written.
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flaminghades14 In reply to ChubbaDubDub [2016-08-14 22:55:16 +0000 UTC]
Glad you enjoyed it and to be honest, I hardly ever know where I am taking it since I never write these stories in one sitting. Thanks for the praise and I'm hoping to have something new soon.
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