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ChimericMachinations [2019-04-07 21:34:53 +0000 UTC]
Hi Flo! Duality needs some changes before we accept her.
What exactly are her magical powers? This is much too vague of a description for us to go on; we need to know exactly what she can do and we need to know their limitations.
From what you say in her abilities section it sounds like she has telekinesis and can shoot some kind of magical blast, but we need more details on those, and they both count as their own strengths.
Details we need include: specific descriptions of them (is the lifting telekinesis? if so, how much can she lift at a time? how long can she do it for? how long between the times she can do it? Or perhaps she can do it consistently, but it drains her energy; this would also be an acceptable limitation)
What are her “blasts” like? Are they explosive in nature, or blunt force damage? Again, we need a general idea of how powerful they are (general size and effect on an opponent) and how often she can use them, and as they sound like a powerful attack it should be something she can only use once or twice per round.
What is the nature of “being powerful” when both her personalities are in control? Does she have enhanced strength or speed, or enhanced magical power? This needs to be clearly defined.
Right now she has no valid weaknesses, but I will return to that problem once I have a better idea of how her powers work and what ones she has exactly.
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FloDraws In reply to ChimericMachinations [2019-04-08 07:31:52 +0000 UTC]
Sorry for being vague, she does have telekinesis where she can lift up objects about 10 tonnes, if she goes over this limit she has the risk of her horns cracking (which means so won't be able to use her powers) and a splitting paralysing headache, she can hold onto objects for about 10 minutes before she loses magical energy, the magical blast she shoots is explosive , although she is limited in using it twice a week since it harvests a lot of magical energy to use it. When both of her personality are in control they get higher endurance and strength and their magic gets stronger, they can lift up to 100 tonnes and use 4 explosive blasts, some weaknesses she has is bright light, since she is used to living in a dark void sudden bright light can disorient her and confuse her. She also doesn't have that much endurance or protection when she is only being controlled by one personality, meaning it's pretty easy to harm her or kill her, that's why she tries to be sly and avoid as much conflict as possible or to do her business quickly and silently.
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ChimericMachinations In reply to FloDraws [2019-04-08 17:16:56 +0000 UTC]
10 tonnes is far too great an amount for us to allow as it would be incredibly overpowered. Please reduce it to 50 pounds.
10 minutes is also far too long. Please reduce it to a minute or less.
How big is the explosion this blast creates? It should not larger than 10 feet across.
Both of her personalities are not allowed to become that powerful when they are in control. They may have higher endurance and strength but I am forbidding the extension of her powers as she is already very powerful and as I told you the weight limit needs to be sharply reduced anyway.
We need those weaknesses stated on her reference sheet, and the ones relating to only being controlled by one personality at a time are only partial weaknesses since they are inapplicable when she is controlled by both. She needs at least five consistent weaknesses (the sensitivity to light is a good one, but she would still need four more, to contrast her five strengths of telekinesis, intelligence, magical blasts, and heightened strength and endurance when both personalities are in control) to be balanced.
Suggestions for weaknesses can be found here: Character Design .
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FloDraws In reply to ChimericMachinations [2019-04-08 17:18:54 +0000 UTC]
Ok I will fix it, do you want me to notify you when it has been edited?
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ChimericMachinations In reply to FloDraws [2019-04-08 17:20:57 +0000 UTC]
Yes, please respond to this comment when you have made the changes I asked for.
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FloDraws In reply to FloDraws [2019-04-08 17:48:52 +0000 UTC]
oo also could I have another discord server invite the last one expired rip.
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ChimericMachinations In reply to FloDraws [2019-04-08 17:55:07 +0000 UTC]
Duality is balanced now and I will invite her, though you do not need to repeat the strengths in that section in the ability section; it is unnecessary and possibly confusing to potential opponents. they only need to be listed once.
I will note you an invite to the server shortly.
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