toastles [2010-01-25 04:54:28 +0000 UTC]
nice job. sounds like you're having fun w/ first person. keep it up. on to part 2!!
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FLPQueen In reply to toastles [2010-01-25 04:56:36 +0000 UTC]
I am! You totally got me thinking in first person--I can't go back! It's so weird.
toastles In reply to FLPQueen [2010-01-25 04:58:57 +0000 UTC]
i know what you mean, i was the same way. once i tried it, i haven't gone back. but there are advantages to 3rd person that you can't get with 1st that are useful... so maybe in the future... 's really good though, i like what you've got here.
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looFsydoboN [2010-01-03 07:13:45 +0000 UTC]
Good job. Very vivid images, especially in that first paragraph. Wonderfully evocative of emotion and establishing a disaster in a way the description of ruins could never do. Well done.
FLPQueen In reply to looFsydoboN [2010-01-03 20:45:52 +0000 UTC]
Thank you I really like this one..it was an exercise that turned awesome-don't you love it when that happens?
looFsydoboN In reply to FLPQueen [2010-01-03 21:00:39 +0000 UTC]
Yes, serendipity is awesome.