Comments: 9
Halatia [2011-09-10 18:02:56 +0000 UTC]
Parts of this were truly intriguing. The narrative kept pulling me along, waiting for that moment of epophany.
Two quick things: slight typo "At times, He suspects a scent of cinnamon in the stairwell leading to his apartment. "
And I'm confused by the "her" present in the fourth to last section (the bit about pop-quiz poetry). Who is the 'her' in this sea of 'hims'?
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FollowMeBackHome In reply to Halatia [2011-09-24 23:18:13 +0000 UTC]
thankyou so much for the comment, and sorry for not replying for so long!
i'm afraid i did not make the "her" clear enough; one of those instances when i expect everyone to think what i'm thinking. the "her", in this case, is the person who was "throwing back [her] head and lolling with appreciation" in the first paragraph/part/stanza.
again, thankyou (:
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EsotericHeart [2011-07-12 22:36:18 +0000 UTC]
oh i have missed your writing so.
i thought i liked the second bit the most but then by the next i wasn't sure and by the end i kind of liked it all.
i wish i could think in staircases.
you're lovely. ♥
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FollowMeBackHome In reply to EsotericHeart [2011-08-27 20:17:09 +0000 UTC]
and oh how your comments make me want to spend weeks and weeks scribbling poetry into dog-eared notebooks, arrange magnetic words into sentence fragments.
thankyou for reading, for taking your time. thankyou so much (:
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nevermindthedarkness [2011-06-15 20:50:46 +0000 UTC]
Long, but great. I really like your writing.
It's been a while since we last talked!
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FollowMeBackHome In reply to nevermindthedarkness [2011-06-15 22:51:38 +0000 UTC]
thankyou so much! i think it's one of the longest pieces i've ever written actually, ahah.
absolutely! that much change (:
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DEAD-OnTheInside [2011-06-11 00:16:42 +0000 UTC]
Amazing! I love how you make my mind smile.
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FollowMeBackHome In reply to DEAD-OnTheInside [2011-06-11 15:42:10 +0000 UTC]
thankyou so much for taking your time to read and comment! (: it means a lot <34567
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