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freddie-j — Karma
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Published: 2010-09-08 17:10:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 182; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 0
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Treading, treading, she found her a worm,The most beautiful worm in the whole wide world.
She kept it safe from harm or storm,
She loved it long and helped it warm.
A farmer's calf ran out to play, and found a mouse that very day,
The most beautiful mouse in the whole wide world.
She helped it run and hide away, she never let its courage sway,
She kept it safe until her dying day.
A prancing deer, she saw a sparrow,
The most beautiful sparrow in the whole wide world.
She loved that bird with all her marrow,
But never did see it more 'til after final barrow.
A small brown ferret out to be, she found a fox whose eyes did gleam,
The most beautiful fox in the whole wide world.
She fast approached, though fox was mean,
'Fore she was eaten, her whole soul beamed.
A rabbit frolicked out that day, she found a wolf in sun and shade,
The most beautiful wolf in the whole wide world.
The rabbit leapt all through the glade,
While great wolf prowled, and charged, and preyed.
Trailing, trailing, she found her a human,
The most beautiful human in the whole wide world.
She fast approached in tiny shell,
Odd unsurprised when soon in hell.
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Interesting choice of how the woman was reincarnated starting as a human, then going to a turtle. I don't quite understand why she went 'backwards' like that though so it seems more like this poem should start with the last verse and end with the first verse. Then again, at the same time I don't want it to because one of the best things about reincarnation is the circular nature.
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It isn't necessarily supposed to be a proper depiction of reincarnation - it's supposed to be a bit screwed up. It's going the wrong way, because life is F'd up like that. You'll notice she kept coming back for more, though.
And she's supposed to be a snail at the end, not a turtle, but I really could've made that clearer. xD Doesn't matter anyways. My point got across. ^^
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Yeah, point of lowly animal was made.
So why DID you want it to be like that? Is your statement against Karma? I mean, that girl would have amazing Karma for her intentions to constantly be to save, and love these animals, even if she did die afterward.
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"Karma" was a somewhat sarcastic title added after I'd finished the entire poem. I wasn't saying anything at all about its existence or whatever - I'm an atheist, actually, and not a spiritual one. It's not meant to be literal. Nothing at all in this poem is meant to be literal, actually.
That said, I rather believe in letting the person reading something come off with their own interpretation. If you're having trouble forming one, try watching Catch Me Up by Gomez - the video for it is what inspired this, and it has the same general thrust, as far as meaning goes.
(I apologize for the delay in response - my computer was quite fussy for a good while there, and was only just repaired yesterday.)
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