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FullMoonMaster — The Possession Of Kathy Macaffe Teaser
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Published: 2014-11-20 01:02:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 14242; Favourites: 22; Downloads: 0
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Definitely not worthwhile. One of the worst transformation.
2/10
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Bought it, watched it, now I'm writting a quick review.
Great art. Cric did an fantastic job. I do hope to see more comics with such visual quality in the future, if possible with more pages, that would be incredibly awesome. The last page seems a little rushed, like Cric ran out of pages to show the fur growing. It happened too fast at that moment.
As for the text, well, it's not that it's a bad story (we don't actually have enough pages to make it matter), but it's really badly written. Lots of errors. And you can't say you don't know about some of them. It definitly looks like lazyness when you're writting "U" instead of "You". At least, fixing that would be a great improvement for future comics. Then, try always writting "I" in caps, that's a rule in english that you can't ignore. There're also a few other mistakes like suspension points, where you wrote only two of them instead of three, or when you wrote "I can not" instead of "I cannot" or "I can't".
Just know that I'm sorry to say things like this, but I paid for this, it's almost as expensive as some other comics with 20 pages (that costs less than 9$) which other people are selling through DA too.
The least of things would be that I don't feel like I've been scamed when I'm actually reading the comic. A good gesture would be to update it on your e-junkie page for future buyers.
If that's too much for you, you could release them without text altogether, because in the end, it's not what's important, and it would still work. After all, the spirit-thing that's cursing Kathy isn't visible and the things she's saying are basic "no - what's happening to me - hard to think - body on fire - you can't - no" type of lines. This writes itself and you see them litterally everywhere. XD
Seriously, if you need help with the text, I could even help out for free...
Actually, one day, I should really do a comic like this.
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