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mintwinter [2010-01-28 17:47:48 +0000 UTC]
looks nice.
But anatomy smth ><
^^"
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supah-com [2010-01-20 16:50:21 +0000 UTC]
i can tell you're getting quite skilled at portraiture, however - there's more work to be done studying the human figure. and, of course, that just comes with time and practice and looking. I can only imagine the heights you can go to if you take a few figure drawing courses.
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Galbinus In reply to supah-com [2010-01-24 02:45:46 +0000 UTC]
Thank you!
And I will definitely look into that! I for sure want to start to take art lessons again.
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supah-com In reply to Galbinus [2010-01-27 02:23:26 +0000 UTC]
I know - I can never get enough. Srsly.
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tourtu [2010-01-19 20:36:49 +0000 UTC]
wow your shading and colors are really nice so far!
people have mentioned anatomy already, so i don't feel the need to reiterate any of that. the face looks like it's a completely different tone from the rest of her body. although i'm sure you're gunna fix that once you continue with it anyways, i felt the need to point it out.
the one thing i don't think anyone has really pointed out are the sheets/fabrics that wrap around her. i have the impression that you're trying to make them look like standard white bedsheets. if anything, right now the whole thing looks extremely thick and heavy. this may be because of all the "lumpy" folds at the bottom left where her butt is. i would suggest using less little hilly folds and bigger, "crisper" contrasty ones.
also i don't know if the fabric just "happened" to cut both of her feet off at the ankles, but i feel as though that detracts from the composition of the image. she's not extremely skinny or extremely fat. the horizontal width of the canvas adds more girth and overall focus on her in general. since there is so much negative black space around her head, the feet and the canvas length are a little awkward. it might help if you balance the composition by putting her directly in the middle by extending the canvas downwards or making it less wide.
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tourtu In reply to Galbinus [2010-01-20 20:31:03 +0000 UTC]
i'm a visual person too, don't worry : P
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also, a quick google search will find you lots of pictures too
on folds in general, i found this especially helpful!
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Avesy [2010-01-19 02:27:34 +0000 UTC]
can't wait to see this done~
I glanced over what others said, trying not to repeat anything c:
I think her torso needs to be a bit bigger, like the area around her ribs seems a little small to me but then again that's when using myself as a reference and bone structure does differ...
also the calves and thighs seem a bit out of proportion to me. Again, this could just be her body and intentional. The shaded thigh looks really curvy so below it looks a bit out of place.
Actually, I think the biggest thing is the back. If you made it larger the legs wouldn't look too weird.
(sorry this is long haha I'm attempting to be helpful here)
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Galbinus In reply to Avesy [2010-01-20 03:19:04 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! I'll definitely look into her back and do some reconfiguring there xD
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squirtsi [2010-01-18 23:57:32 +0000 UTC]
Since people have already told you about the head and neck, all I really have to add is that people's waists are thicker than their necks in general. Her neck is nearly as thick as her waist so her neck definitely needs to be shrunk. The only other problem I have is that her hair kind of looks like a wig instead of actually growing out of her skull; try adding some root-like texture where it's appropriate. However, that could just be because this is a WIP and not finished.
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zefiraelRain [2010-01-18 23:32:47 +0000 UTC]
Hmm... ok apart from the neck and head which have already been mentioned...
I can't help thinking that her hands look a little stubbby, a bit too short maybe... At the moment the hair looks a bit like folded fabric where it's hanging loose, but I won't say much about that because I know it's just a WIP at the moment xD
Seems okay apart from those points (:
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Galbinus In reply to zefiraelRain [2010-01-19 00:46:14 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! Yeah, her hands are pretty small.
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zefiraelRain In reply to Galbinus [2010-01-19 00:58:35 +0000 UTC]
No problem~
Heheh yeah I was wondering about that... I wasn't sure if they were meant to be that small or not ^^"
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peterfeedsthesinners [2010-01-18 20:59:39 +0000 UTC]
neck and head too big for body
that's about it
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My-Psychedelic [2010-01-18 20:29:35 +0000 UTC]
The neck looks a bit thick. I'm not really sure on this one but I think you could make the torso wider, like, her ribcage looks too small to me. And maybe raise up her thigh/make it slightly thinner because it's kind of making the torso look a little longer than it should be. These are all pretty insignificant things but I'm just putting it out there in case you want to change it up a bit. I'm honestly not sure if those things actually are anatomically incorrect but again, I'm just trying to help lol. I don't really see any shading errors. It looks fab though and it will still look great if you decide not to change anything.
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My-Psychedelic In reply to Galbinus [2010-01-18 21:24:47 +0000 UTC]
Lol I'm sorry I didn't mean to write so much; I know a lot of criticism, even if it is helpful, can really be a downer. I really do like it though! You're still like 80 times better at anatomy than most people your age are.
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