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vitellan [2010-01-19 03:34:28 +0000 UTC]

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It's great to see another of your works in progress! As usual, one of your strong points is the face. Her gaze is mesmerizing, and her bone structure is well-defined there. You also clearly know how to shade muscles. The secondary lighting on her calves adds a lot to the image.

In terms of the torso, if you widened it slightly and even shifted the lower half of the woman's body a little to the left, it would remove much of the awkwardness you currently see in her pose. As an alternative, you might also consider reducing the arch in her back (thus shifting the lower part of her body a little more to the right instead), which would make her look much more relaxed as she is sitting.

Her hair texture is lovely, and the colors, as always, are well-chosen. Hope to see the finished version soon!

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heysawbones [2010-01-18 20:28:30 +0000 UTC]

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Yeah bro.

Your colors are all nice (like usual), the issue here is mostly that the body parts aren't in proportion to each other. You either need to increase the size of the body - just the whole thing below the neck - or take everything from neck-up and shrink it. The neck is quite broad on the shoulders, and the shoulders themselves are proportionally the same width in comparison to the head as a baby's shoulders. The palm on the foreground hand (her right) is an acceptable size, but the fingers and thumb are quite short, and jointed poorly. The background hand has a similar problem, except its palm is too short in addition to the fingers. That back hand is also quite stiff - consider a more natural pose.

is she sitting down with her lower legs in water? If not, I want to note that standing that way would be pretty uncomfortable. D:; Art's subjective that way, you can have her stand however you like, but I thought I'd mention it.

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mintwinter [2010-01-28 17:47:48 +0000 UTC]

looks nice.
But anatomy smth ><
^^"

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supah-com [2010-01-20 16:50:21 +0000 UTC]

i can tell you're getting quite skilled at portraiture, however - there's more work to be done studying the human figure. and, of course, that just comes with time and practice and looking. I can only imagine the heights you can go to if you take a few figure drawing courses.

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tourtu [2010-01-19 20:36:49 +0000 UTC]

wow your shading and colors are really nice so far!

people have mentioned anatomy already, so i don't feel the need to reiterate any of that. the face looks like it's a completely different tone from the rest of her body. although i'm sure you're gunna fix that once you continue with it anyways, i felt the need to point it out.

the one thing i don't think anyone has really pointed out are the sheets/fabrics that wrap around her. i have the impression that you're trying to make them look like standard white bedsheets. if anything, right now the whole thing looks extremely thick and heavy. this may be because of all the "lumpy" folds at the bottom left where her butt is. i would suggest using less little hilly folds and bigger, "crisper" contrasty ones.

also i don't know if the fabric just "happened" to cut both of her feet off at the ankles, but i feel as though that detracts from the composition of the image. she's not extremely skinny or extremely fat. the horizontal width of the canvas adds more girth and overall focus on her in general. since there is so much negative black space around her head, the feet and the canvas length are a little awkward. it might help if you balance the composition by putting her directly in the middle by extending the canvas downwards or making it less wide.

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Avesy [2010-01-19 02:27:34 +0000 UTC]

can't wait to see this done~
I glanced over what others said, trying not to repeat anything c:

I think her torso needs to be a bit bigger, like the area around her ribs seems a little small to me but then again that's when using myself as a reference and bone structure does differ...
also the calves and thighs seem a bit out of proportion to me. Again, this could just be her body and intentional. The shaded thigh looks really curvy so below it looks a bit out of place.

Actually, I think the biggest thing is the back. If you made it larger the legs wouldn't look too weird.

(sorry this is long haha I'm attempting to be helpful here)

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Deer-in-Headlights [2010-01-19 02:24:55 +0000 UTC]

I'm agreeing with the too big head/ too small rib cage thing, also the calves look small in relation to the thighs. That being said I love the face and all of the loose drapery. I see you start things out by blocking color and then making "lines" by darkening. I have to try that !

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squirtsi [2010-01-18 23:57:32 +0000 UTC]

Since people have already told you about the head and neck, all I really have to add is that people's waists are thicker than their necks in general. Her neck is nearly as thick as her waist so her neck definitely needs to be shrunk. The only other problem I have is that her hair kind of looks like a wig instead of actually growing out of her skull; try adding some root-like texture where it's appropriate. However, that could just be because this is a WIP and not finished.

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kotta-kasai [2010-01-18 23:34:56 +0000 UTC]

Ahhh colours<3 so pretty!

It seems like quite a few people have posted, heheh:] my suggestion for you is to focus a little more on the area around the ribcage/back: the girl is clearly thin, however, her back should be a little thicker. I would recommend making the back convex until it reaches about her waist, where it could be more concave until her hips come into play. The human back arching creates more of an S shape than a U.

In layman's terms, this problem could be easily fixed by building the area under her right armpit up with a little more skin. hahaha.

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zefiraelRain [2010-01-18 23:32:47 +0000 UTC]

Hmm... ok apart from the neck and head which have already been mentioned...
I can't help thinking that her hands look a little stubbby, a bit too short maybe... At the moment the hair looks a bit like folded fabric where it's hanging loose, but I won't say much about that because I know it's just a WIP at the moment xD
Seems okay apart from those points (:

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peterfeedsthesinners [2010-01-18 20:59:39 +0000 UTC]

neck and head too big for body
that's about it

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OrenDotan [2010-01-18 20:49:22 +0000 UTC]

the anatomy needs a bit of correction i'd like to add to the comments above mine that the head is too big in proportion to the body and the tone difference bitween the body and the head make them look dissconected

hope this will help you

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My-Psychedelic [2010-01-18 20:29:35 +0000 UTC]

The neck looks a bit thick. I'm not really sure on this one but I think you could make the torso wider, like, her ribcage looks too small to me. And maybe raise up her thigh/make it slightly thinner because it's kind of making the torso look a little longer than it should be. These are all pretty insignificant things but I'm just putting it out there in case you want to change it up a bit. I'm honestly not sure if those things actually are anatomically incorrect but again, I'm just trying to help lol. I don't really see any shading errors. It looks fab though and it will still look great if you decide not to change anything.

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francis-john [2010-01-18 20:22:07 +0000 UTC]

the one thing noticeably incorrect here for me is the neck, too wide! chest is also too small and lastly the left thigh (viewers) seems to be dislocated

I love how you draw faces though they are indeed very pretty

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