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GGJ2 — Rouge roughdraft 2
Published: 2006-08-03 03:42:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 7420; Favourites: 111; Downloads: 217
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I bet you all are thinkin' "Why the hell am I posting the same exact thing?" Well its because, I have a few people to thank for pointing out the short-comings with this peice, I've got , , and to thank for their critique and a few others on the (last post) of this sketch. I give most of my graditude toward , he gave me exactly what I've been looking for in a critique, he broke it down and gave several very well thought out suggestions.
Thank you! Thank you! Kind sir! Also ive tried a suggestion of 's to add lumps and bumps to the bellies I draw for my vorish works, and well now you see the result.
Tell me what you really think!
For example:
Could I change the face or hair in some way?
Could there be a change in the clothing some how?
What about her pose?
Please, don't be afraid to say what you really think, I'm very open to suggestions and opinion.
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Comments: 9
its hard to drawn people on side weiw it easier for a slit tilting to side
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Murrr, vore and Rouge, two good things put together^^
Good job!
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Why is this in scraps? o.O"
Well for advanced comments, I think the belly positioning against her breast looks alittle...off. Off but sexah none the less ^_^
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The thighs and butt are fixed, and for that I'm highly glad. The belly 'lopsidedness' also appears to be fixed which is a very good thing. Yay on the bigger bust as well.
Most importantly, the ears and facial expression are doing better, but could stand a little more tweaking. I can't decide if the left ear (the one behind her head) should be facing forward or back; but from the ghosty line of previous attempt I sort of prefer the back tilt as her closer ear appears to be tilted back. The eyes are much more intent now, but I feel the smile could use a bit more grin, or a hint of batty fang to drive home the 'Mine' statement of the picture.
Another minor fussing, which may be more suited to the color step than the pencil; is either tearing or thinning of the suit around her belly. Spandex is lovely, but takes away some fun when it's so flexible we never see flesh. Could also stand to see her hand groping -into- her belly a bit more. The pressure marks are there which conveys it, but if she's having life sized snacks her perogitive might be more to knead her meals into submission rather than just idly rub her stomach.
If you -really- want to get the most bang for your buck, so to speak, from this character and pose; I would consider doing the one you're doing now.. with evil smirk, lumpy belly and next victim in frame as the decidedly -vore- pic. And consider a variant version with nicer expression, smoothly round belly and lacking victim guy to cater to the inflatey/pregnant crowd. Goodness knows you don't have to, but the pose and size really works either way.
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MUCH better. The ears are more bat/demon-like, instead of elven, and the stomach bulges really hammer home that this is vore, and that there's someone in there...who probably doesn't want to be there ^_^ Still glad you chose her SA2 outfit, too ^_^
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