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GirlWithAHat — The One True Love 2.1
Published: 2010-01-07 10:43:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 4287; Favourites: 45; Downloads: 0
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I wrote it again after =Lena-The-Angel critiqued my most famous piece .
This time in ink, without the mistake and without the bold parts. But with a withered hibiskus blossom for decoration.
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This time i really can't see anything wrong it! I mean, sure, last time i only found 2 (?) things wrong with it. But you've heeded my advice (which you didn't have to so thank you!) and made it a whole lot better than it was before.
You got good lighting, so there's no issue of not being able to read the piece accurately. Your handwriting is impeccable (if i wrote it, noone would be able to read it!) And the flower (which i've now forgotten the name of) gives a really great effect. Especially in relation to what the text is talking about. Because the text in itself is quite, dark, for lack of a better word, talking about fear and all that. And the the withering, the death of the flower, relate to that very nicely. Nice tough ^.^ Good work!
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Thanks!
The flower is, or was, a hibiscus. We have a lot of dead plants right now becasue they all froze when we forgot to put a heater into the wintergarden.
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Your so very welcome
Ooh nice. XD I'm not that good at recognizing flowers it has to be said.
Well, although that sucks for the plants, it's great for you 
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I'm not good at recognising flowers, either, although I study Biology.
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Haha, are you meant to be able to recognise them for biology?
That's good then
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People always expect that of me. It's the same with birds and butterflies...
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I didn't expect it, i was just curious. I don't expect much of biologists, i don't mean that in a nasty way! I'm just not really familiar with them/it xD
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Many people around here believe that biologists have to know eveything about nature. 
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Haha, thats silly isnt it! Noone can know everything about nature anyway. And biology isn't just about nature!
No it definately isnt xD
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Finally someone who understands that!
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I saw version one first, and there was a lot I liked about that one, but this is probably my favorite. If only for the withered hibiskus, it's beautiful and really fits with the feel/theme of the poem. ^^
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Thank you for the feedback and the favs.
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I'm not really used to commenting on literature, but I'll try and do my best. 
"Happiness does not depend
just on this one person
you will never meet;
it is yours to find
here and now."
This goes to my favourite quotes I think
Tag: complete!
(Holy crap, this must be the longest comment I've ever written on dA... xD)
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I am honoured to have gotten the longest comment you've ever written on dA.
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Thank you, and for the fav, too.
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your quite welcome... i really truly loved it.. :]
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I saw that before you told me.
And by the way, thank you for those nice words on Chocolate Monster. They nearly made me cry (for happiness of course).
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Extraordinary! Brilliant, well done, I must say! It's creative, to be sure, because it's a different take, or analogy on the subject of love and I, for one, like it. I love the way you've artistically placed the flower, too, of course, the whole thing is superb, to be sure.
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This is amazing. Something about using graphing paper really adds on to it, also.
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