Icehair [2007-08-24 16:43:24 +0000 UTC]
Love the wry use of the third person limited/objective here! Esp. paragraphs 4-8. The distant speculations about peoples' motives is both entertaining and effective. Sort of Mirror-of-Her-Dreams-series Stephen Donaldson meets Nathaniel Hawthorne... Maybe it should be carried out throughout? You do change into a more omniscient/personal point of view at several times. Just a thought. Oh, and.... errm... "Seven noses hung from the thick wooden beams"...? Btw, thanks for the link and for Mr. Poe to you too
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Grammer In reply to Icehair [2007-08-27 08:00:13 +0000 UTC]
Ah, yes It's kinda visible were I broke off, and then started again next writing session. Ops, will maybe get corrected when I find time to go over the gallery. You are very welcome. Glad you liked it.
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