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HauntedDragon005 — Goodbye
Published: 2008-06-05 18:55:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 166; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 4
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It's time we said goodbye my dear.It's been about a year;
and we haven't spoken,
you've left me quite broken.
see, look at those silly rhymes.
I'm filling up these lines,
with utter nonsense.
This pen cannot describe what I feel,
No. What I felt for you.
I won't let myself love you anymore.
Goodbye. You are not here anymore.
I guess it was over a long time ago.
Memories
will
haunt.
I want,
my love for you to fade.
Comments: 2
You know, the effect the rhyming has is actually really impressive... makes it almost mocking of how trite it all could be... and then when you say "see, look at those silly rhymes./I'm filling up these lines," you mock all that as well... I really like it.
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yeah definite mocking tone, you picked that up right away.
I felt angry writing this one. I guess you could tell.
Thanks I'm glad you like the rhymes. Actually trite is exactly how I feel about rhymes, which is why I mocked it in the first place. But like you said I guess it's the mocking tone that gives them effect in the first place.
Thanks. Although just like in real life. This wasn't a real goodbye... a couple days later I wrote yet another poem about him.
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