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Published: 2014-05-18 10:06:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 7754; Favourites: 32; Downloads: 0
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In March, I asked you what I shall work on next. hippo2.deviantart.com/journal/β¦ You voted for a comic with David and Amelia with TG elements. So here's the comic.Previous Page: fav.me/d7isxbq
There's a sequel comic to this story: fav.me/d7lcokk
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I liked it. It was a fun entertaining story in which David got to learn one of the most important lessons of human (also work place) interaction: empathy.
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Fantastic story. Karma always get what it wants.
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LOL, great ending!
You should turn this into a sitcom.
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What don't you like about it?
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Really the premise all things consider since really all the young man did was a harmless joke. So if you wanted a TG lesson should have been done where he acted like a total Dick about it. Even then that be breaking his character
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I understand your point. Amelia clearly overreacted here. And then, things got out of control when Mr. Massri made his move on Daphne.
It's difficult to forsee the complete impact of this experience on David's character. I have planned that he is more considerate to Amelia now. In bed, he'll use his experiences from the other side of the fence to make Amelia really happy.
That is if he doesn't loose all his faith in Amelia. I don't think he will react that extreme, but Amelia might have to win some of his faith back. Or David will talk to Martha about it.
Anyway, now we have some tension in the relation between Amelia and David. I see some potential for new stories and comics.
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While true it could have been done much better if a little extra care was handle in writing. Esepically by have alecherous character like mr. Massri, what gets me is you made a quite a shallow foe just to make tension instead f making it more in depth. Its fine when you want a sort of bad guy a week deal but with stories like this you basically made a starwman of men who had a lubedo and active sex drive.
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It's not the libido and sexdrive I critizise. It's how he abuses his power and how he puts Daphne under sexual pressure. The last page gives an indication that he did it to his secretaries before. I critizise this behaviour.
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Well that too but you need to be well more adult with it or if you bring that up go the full nine yards. As for the Punishment I rather the wish be him exposed and feel what he was going to do to the Hotel.
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Showing a rape scene in a comic would be too much for dA. In the first draft, the scene in the elevator was much more explicite, but because of the dA policy, I tuned it down, a lot. Or what do you mean?
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Not rape dude, attempt at it.
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That's about what I had planned for the elevator scene: Mr. Massri using the emergency break. Then he's pushing Daphne in a corner of the elevator when she doesn't accept his offer. She got away by hitting him and using her general key to reactivate the elevator and escapes.
Why didn't I use it? I am afraid that it would be too extreme for dA. Maybe it isn't with the appropriate filters. I don'tk know.
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That's the thing you need to be brave and dont worry about DA, they show rape for christ sakes. That's no joke ether.
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I'll do an alternative version of Page 6 then, with the appropriate filters.
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Neat and maybe have a better reason for his TGing. I was thinking maybe a cursed object
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I won't change ther reason, because it shows an interesting developement in Amelia's personality. It's a big flaw that needs to be solved in a future story.
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That's true, sorry bout that just Genie doing TG on someone bugs the crap out of me
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So it's because you don't like TG? Fair enough. I have no problem with that.
Thanks for pointing out the possible consequences for Amelia and David. I'll pick them up in another story.
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Yeah and really, gender switch is not really something that should make a difference. It's just to me, Gender is just cosmetic when it comes to a true character. THey are defined as a person.
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The interesting aspect is indeed how a person adapts to the change. If you look on body- and gender-swap comedies (I'm not talking about porn movies here), a lot of the comedy comes from the difficulties of dealing with a life while being in the wrong body. A TGed man will lack the manerisms of a lady. In the cinema, Daphne sits in a very un-ladylike manner. We also have the arkward dress-up scene and Daphne gets hit on by JΓΆrg and (in a more agressive way) by Mr. Massri. If the person is switched over a long time, it's interesting how the personality adapts, but I didn't intent to go that way.
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I know I know but it still bugs the shit out of me
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I get it. It just isn't your cup of tea. Well, you can still enjoy the other Martha stories I wrote. Only a small portion of them has TG elements. Is there a specific type you enjoy?
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I get it. It just isn't your cup of tea. Well, you can still enjoy the other Martha stories I wrote. Only a small portion of them has TG elements. Is there a specific type you enjoy?
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A few actual, ones that have Martha learn Genies must be people who learn not to use magic as much as they want.
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