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RiEile [2018-01-27 17:16:29 +0000 UTC]

Hello from ProjectComment !

Firstly I should say that I love the dynamic pose of the two characters, it really conveys the passion and the chemistry between them.

The anatomy is quite decent, however I would suggest using real people for reference rather than other artists' reference sheets. Reference sheets are amazing as long as it is you who does them as you can learn a lot creating one from real models, but using another artist's artwork for reference has a pitfall of copying their mistakes and exaggerating their inaccuracies. Here I can see that the male character's head is a bit too small (not sure whether it was on the reference or not). If you look at his eye position, it is nowhere near the midline of his head, so a little bit of cranium won't hurt him. Moreover, even the most soft and thin hair has its volume that would add to the head size.

Another issue I want to address is coloring. It is nice that you are doing it in grayscale first, focusing on the value and not on the color itself. However, I see that you were trying to make light what you think is light, and to make dark what you think is dark. It has worked nicely for the girl's hair, because you can clearly see that the hair is light, but it is not lighter than the skin (it is a common mistake to make hair lighter than light skin - never happens for natural hair colors). However, skin looks equally light almost everywhere. My suggestion would be to define the light source (which I imagine is from the upper right), draw the light rays, figure out what is in the shadow. Hint: the girl's forearm, her leg, the guy's back and the back of his arm, partially, the girl's face. Then add the cast shadow on the guy's torso and his face.

Also try to use a larger harder opaque brush (that blends well) to model the shapes. Now you have too many visible strokes on the shapes that should be rather smooth (like arms). You can even start with simple cell shading and define it more rather than apply multiple strokes with a relatively small transparent brush.

With this I believe I should wrap up my comment. I really admire your attempt to draw consistently as well as trying to depict your characters semi-realistically in complex poses. You are making an amazing progress compared to your earlier works, keep it up!

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DeezzArt [2018-01-17 13:35:37 +0000 UTC]

Hello there I'm from ProjectComment  

it's a really nice piece you've did there !
I like how in love they look, it feels like they're a really great couple without even reading the bio
the pose is really well executed
and the girl's dress looks so flowy, I'm loving it !
also I love her hair, not only the way you did them but also the way you shaded them
I like the fact that you did not put a background here, so it's easier to focus on the characters only

But I feel like you could have changed a few things
that will probably make this drawing even better  
I think that the way you colored the skin is a bit too harsh, you should have made it smoother
also the girl's harm looks a bit weird, specially if you start staring at it
also the man's head and hair: the head looks a bit too small compared to his body
and his hair looks a bit off

Anyway it's a really nice drawing, I hope I did not sound rude, I truly think that you're a really good artist 
just keep up progressing ! 

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