Comments: 26
SPNLifeStyle24 [2018-07-12 05:12:43 +0000 UTC]
It's really good but thing kept me from liking it was wincest you no there brothers, and thats just gross. any way great story.
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yaoi-fangirl-kickass [2010-08-23 00:29:56 +0000 UTC]
Great story light fluffy, but one writer to another may I give you a little advice just about ways to make it neater and an easier read? its not a crtique because I Thought it was a great story, but each time someone talks it should be a new paragraph, it helps avoid the cluttered look and confusion.
Just a thought. Keep writing because you have great ideas and I love it to bits!
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yaoi-fangirl-kickass In reply to Ibbet [2010-08-23 05:00:40 +0000 UTC]
Alright, well if you like it go with it, whatever is comfertable right?
and your welcome, I'm sorry if my comment came off as rude.
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yaoi-fangirl-kickass In reply to Ibbet [2010-08-23 17:32:23 +0000 UTC]
Oh no, I'm just always worried that what I say comes off that way.
But once again GREAT story! love it!
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DemiDeviEevee [2010-06-30 11:36:39 +0000 UTC]
XDD
I love the ending. Thanks for the lols.
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calceil In reply to Ibbet [2010-06-29 14:03:45 +0000 UTC]
It made me smile so much :3
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