Foxbear [2012-03-02 17:42:28 +0000 UTC]
Wonderful story!
your character development is excellent and general grammar and sentence structure are good. One thing was a bit confusing. The scene where June meets Raf's foster home. It was hard to envision what she was seeing and who all the people were she was talking to and about.
Keep up the good work.
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